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Dark Poetry #3

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green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

0 posted 2003-07-04 01:21 PM

It starts to run
As it starts to pray
Then grabs the gun
And dies today

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short, sweet, dark
enjoy

Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

1 posted 2003-07-05 01:09 AM

sorry doesn't do too much for me.

Mad_Hatter
Member

since 2003-06-29

Posts 393
Canada

2 posted 2003-07-05 03:55 AM

I like it. This is one of those poems where you have only a few lines to make an impression upon someone and you made that impression on me.

Alnilam
Member

since 2003-07-04

Posts 75

3 posted 2003-07-05 11:06 AM

I liked it . Good, short, simple, and gets the message straight to the reader.

~*Alnilam*~
The worst tragedy for a poet is to be admired through being misunderstood.
-Jean Cocteau-

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

4 posted 2003-07-05 11:55 PM

Thanks you guys for the feedback. I havent been feeling wonderful lately but I will start writing better soon.
THanks again

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