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DrPepperIsSexy
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since 2003-06-30

Posts 1

0 posted 2003-07-02 10:53 PM

Without A Trace

On this lonely night, my thoughts are only of you.
As I hold your perfect picture in my soiled hands.
Reflecting on so many things we shared.
When my wildest dreams cametrue.

I sit here gazing at the raging rapids below,
and I wonder, "How will you remember me?"
As the one true love you forced away?
Or the coward, too weak and frightened to stay?

Now I stand, staring up at the stars,
but all I can think of are these god-forsaken scars.
Left over from wounds that can never fully heal.
The ones you left me with, forever to conceal.

Here in the dark I'll descend, hoping to set my soul free.
After one last breath, I leave my life behind me.
The wind whips my hair against my paling face,
as I depart from this world; gone... without a trace.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

1 posted 2003-07-02 10:58 PM

hey chels.this is ri! but duh, as i said, i love this, and you didn't DIDN'T screw up the rhyming...it sounds great.......good writing....
luv ya!

riley

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

2 posted 2003-07-03 01:10 PM

hi and welcome, very goood poem, i like...so much emotion, powerful, raw...
"Here in the dark I'll descend, hoping to set my soul free.
After one last breath, I leave my life behind me.
The wind whips my hair against my paling face,
as I depart from this world; gone... without a trace."
can't wait to see more of you...

"in a past life i was a woodcarver's knife: the sharpend blade of a wood cutter, the eldest son of the chief's brother: a maker of drums"

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

3 posted 2003-07-08 11:38 PM

I must say, somehow I missed this.. but I will add... its a GREATLY written poem. Well expressed and full of emotions. I hope to read more of your work!

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2003-07-11 04:13 PM

Nice writing...James

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