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Dark Poetry #3

Shaking Inside

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

0 posted 2003-06-21 10:44 AM

(G'day. I haven't posted here in years now! Here's a poem I wrote recently... hope you like it.)

i hate you
for making me shake inside
making me cringe
and answerable
for everything i do.

how dare you
belittle me, make fun
of who i am
and what i do...
instantly criticising.

how can you
call me your
precious one.

say you love me
more than anything.

and then
kick me in the
guts.

i hate you
for taking away
me.

~ April 2003 ~

It's better to be a lion for a day than a sheep all your life.
-- Sister Elizabeth Kenny

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-06-21 02:03 PM

Even though, I know this hurts, you wrote of the rejection very well.
Hugs

Ethel

laurie
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 153
canada, ontario

2 posted 2003-06-21 05:46 PM

ok... l like this... ethels' right, you've painted the pain of rejection very well, and made it possible even for someone who's never been rejected (in that way, l mean) to know what it's like, or relate to it, in some way.
thank you for a nice, heart felt read.
laurie.

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

3 posted 2003-06-21 08:28 PM

And then I took myself back with open arms.

Shenachie

Great write!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2003-06-21 09:28 PM

I'm with you...how dare they...James

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