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ObeyYourGoldfish
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since 2003-05-18
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0 posted 2003-05-19 05:12 PM


I am a fictacious character,
a bum surrounded by rich kids,
a dark flower in a bed of daisies,
a freak surrounded by clowns,
a tear on the face of a loved one.
I'm everything you dont want to be
This, my friend, is me
I am lost, in plain sight
a timid rabbit, ready to take flight
I am the person dressed in black
a mind fleeing from attack
A freak you see,
This, my friend, is me
I am th person crying from rejection
a tear, a drop of blood, my infection
Long time ago i forgot how to smile
I haven't been happy in quite a while
This, my friend, is me
Tell me,... you must see.

Yea.. Open to critism or support and suggestions whatever. I need all the help i can get!

You say Freak like it's a bad thing...
~Breah

© Copyright 2003 Breah Burton - All Rights Reserved
Xeonox
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since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764
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1 posted 2003-05-20 01:41 AM


Very nice piece. Great way of letting your emotions talk.
BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
2 posted 2003-05-21 10:39 PM


I'm trying to get myself out of a situation like that myself...hope it goes good for ya.
Jenni

Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their
ground. --Anonymous

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2003-05-21 11:17 PM


You have managed to put your feels down quite well. This is a very good piece of poetry.

I hope you can continue to be yourself within this loneliness you feel. I alos hope you can see some kind of light within the darkness. We all have times when there is nothing but darkness....hopefully we get through in decent shape. If you need someone to talk to......feel free to contact me.

Marilyn.

Brad Majors
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Georgia
4 posted 2003-05-27 11:03 AM


I have felt like this before so I understand. Don't let it eat you.
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