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Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
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York, England

0 posted 2003-05-18 02:04 PM


Winter Nights


I touch your sobbing face, feeling the end,
You my love, I hold dearest of all,
Our family’s feud will stop our love,
So now out of this life we must fall.

The bitter wind freezes the tears,
As we take up the vial,
This drink is to the family and
The warring way that we are in denial.

My lips suck at yours, tasting the sweet poison
As it slicks through my dying frame,
I look to your eyes and see the love
A love that none could tame.

The snow falls on our lives,
December claims our breath,
The end of the warm season
Symbolised by our death

This is not your average love,
This is ours forever and beyond,
In death we will win the fight,
And savour the unbreakable bond

That binds our souls into one,
Beyond the winds of this night,
Our mortal love grows more and more,
As we step into the light…


© Copyright 2003 Peter J Marcroft - All Rights Reserved
Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

1 posted 2003-05-18 02:50 PM


Wow!!! This is SO powerful and filled with passion.  I need to read it many more times, and I'll saving it my library.  Just love how you wrote it.
Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
Posts 265
York, England
2 posted 2003-05-18 03:41 PM


Thank you very much for the feedback and I am truly honoured that you enjoyed it so much, take care
Kahlil
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3 posted 2003-06-14 12:31 PM


Peter, this sounds like one of those silent wars that just be stopped.  You KNOW what's there, death is near.  Sorry I'm the only one to comment on this...maybe you wrote it just for me, so thank you!
Kahlil
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4 posted 2003-06-14 03:55 PM


oh, gawl, I meant just CAN'T be stopped...
duh!

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2003-06-24 03:26 PM


Nice writing...James
Peter J Marcroft
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since 2003-02-02
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York, England
6 posted 2003-06-24 10:24 PM


Thank you all for your responses, I am flattered that you think of highly of it and I am grateful for your support.
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