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Paragon
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since 2003-02-16
Posts 114


0 posted 2003-05-07 12:31 PM



dark hair blends
seamlessly with the night
he wanders
dreamlessly in the darkness
though sleep hearkens
he does not obey the call
streaks of crimson
color the whites of
his eyes while pools
of brown sulk in
the center
The mind body and
soul are all in one
whole, however
this night he has
seperated his mind
in response to
the everpresent
overthoughtfulness
of him and her
of this and that
of when and why
of who and how
none of that mattered
now, all he knew
was the burning
sensation in his
legs as he pulsed
along sumerton
in this night
he had become
as he was
a drifting vagabond
free of emotion
loosed in rage
and soon captured
by sanity, somehow
he wanted to keep
his humanity
never again would
he allow his vanity
to get out of hand
thinking himself
to be a worthwhile
man

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teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
1 posted 2003-05-07 11:10 AM


Is this about yourself?  Anyway it's really vivid, you are very adept at describing.  Good job. Keep writing I like your work.
peaceful_dreamer
Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW
2 posted 2003-05-09 08:04 PM


wow

there are 2 ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it. -unknown

wings of the moon
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land
3 posted 2003-05-10 06:26 AM


wow wow wow...
a very nice way of putting it, it flows beautifully...
well done
Claire xx

"more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you"

Kahlil
Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

4 posted 2003-05-10 10:43 AM


You've described this man so well.  I especially like:
"and soon captured
by sanity, somehow
he wanted to keep
his humanity
never again would
he allow his vanity
to get out of hand"
And then the positive ending.
I'm saving this one.

Paragon
Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114

5 posted 2003-05-10 06:41 PM


I know myself I'd have to say, and thanks for the compliments all. I am grateful you enjoyed it.. was an odd experience which was easy to right about.
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