Dark Poetry #3 |
Sleepless night on sumerton drive |
Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
dark hair blends seamlessly with the night he wanders dreamlessly in the darkness though sleep hearkens he does not obey the call streaks of crimson color the whites of his eyes while pools of brown sulk in the center The mind body and soul are all in one whole, however this night he has seperated his mind in response to the everpresent overthoughtfulness of him and her of this and that of when and why of who and how none of that mattered now, all he knew was the burning sensation in his legs as he pulsed along sumerton in this night he had become as he was a drifting vagabond free of emotion loosed in rage and soon captured by sanity, somehow he wanted to keep his humanity never again would he allow his vanity to get out of hand thinking himself to be a worthwhile man |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
Is this about yourself? Anyway it's really vivid, you are very adept at describing. Good job. Keep writing I like your work. |
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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
wow there are 2 ways of spreading light: to be the candle, or the mirror that reflects it. -unknown |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
wow wow wow... a very nice way of putting it, it flows beautifully... well done Claire xx "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
You've described this man so well. I especially like: "and soon captured by sanity, somehow he wanted to keep his humanity never again would he allow his vanity to get out of hand" And then the positive ending. I'm saving this one. |
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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
I know myself I'd have to say, and thanks for the compliments all. I am grateful you enjoyed it.. was an odd experience which was easy to right about. |
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