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RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

0 posted 2003-05-03 05:51 PM

My eyes
cannot
witness
the lies
within me.

I struggle
to focus,
everything
is obscured.

I am
lost,
and you
cannot
save me.

I am in
agony.
My soul
is too
fragile
for you
to mend.

Drifting
to far
away places,
you cannot
reach.

I have
fallen
behind.
I have
lost this
race.

My eyes are
deceptive,
showing only
what they
wish me
to avow.

Blindly,
I walk
into dark
unknowns.

Oblivious
as to how
ugly and
dangerous
my life
has become.

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

qtpieelmo
Senior Member

since 2000-07-04

Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY

1 posted 2003-05-03 06:41 PM

This is great--the last stanza is the best, sums it all up!

ELMO

"No man is EVER worth my tears, and the one who is, will never make me cry!"

just a junkie
Member

since 2003-03-04

Posts 53

2 posted 2003-05-03 08:08 PM

Very emotional read. I hope you do find some inner peace. Keep faith! Thank you for sharing your soul.

I suppose this would be what I would say to you .... had you not said it to me first!!!!

GREAT poem!!! I loved it!

Just a Junkie

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

3 posted 2003-05-05 01:07 PM

brilliant!

j-oh-E
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 59
Texas, USA

4 posted 2003-05-05 01:59 PM

Excellent. I'm sorry your life has become what you say it has because this is a beautiful poem. I mean that.

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

5 posted 2003-05-05 03:37 PM

Hi Brad,

Thank you for writing. I am so pleased you liked my poem. Keep faith!

Bye,
RavenEye

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

6 posted 2003-05-05 03:42 PM

Hi j-oh-e,

It gives me such great pleasure that you have such high praises for my poem. My life is not as dark as it was a year ago when I wrote this poem, but thank you so much for caring and thanks for writing.

Bye,

RavenEye

Paragon
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

7 posted 2003-05-05 10:11 PM

Awe inspiring skill, I must say that you have written something that etches thoughts and images into the mind. Thanks for the chance to read it.

Paragon

P.S: When life gives you hell, do what it doesnt expect... stand up look it in the eyes and fight on.. in other words give it hell right back.

RavenEye
Junior Member

since 2003-05-02

Posts 29
Ohio, USA

8 posted 2003-05-05 11:56 PM

Hi Paragon,

Thank you for the kind words about my poem and for the very sound advice. You are so right about standing up to life when it tries to drag you down! Thanks again and I wish you all the best!

Bye,
RavenEye

Keep faith, hold your dreams in your palm of your hand as you reach for your goals!

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