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IcyFlamez89
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0 posted 2003-04-14 09:23 PM


At your feet I laid my heart,
And you threw it back at me.
You toyed with my emotions,
Played me cruelly.

You enslaved my feeble soul,
Shunned my purest love,
You put me through such tortures
That no one should deserve.

So now time has claimed my body,
And made me hard as stone
I no longer feel emotion,
I've become a hollow drone.

And now you come to me,
After all these wasted years,
Asking for forgiveness
And to help dry out your tears.

But my heart stayed cold as steel
For the darkness wraps me tight.
So to your shattered body I
Can only laugh with spite.

Come not to me again,
Lest I show all the pain.
And make you suffer what I went through,
Torture so arcane.

My heart had almost melted.
My blood had almost stirred,
I was close to again believing,
All your touching words.

I almost felt you aching,
I almost felt your fear.
I almost felt your anguish,
And I almost shed some tears....
...Almost....
[Grins very coldly]

[This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (04-14-2003 09:26 PM).]

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Kahlil
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1 posted 2003-04-14 11:42 PM


oh good, you pulled yourself out of it!
at a later time you might be able to share the feelings, etc., of the other person, but at the same time highly maintaining your own dignity.  I like this poem, I was teetering, great!

IcyFlamez89
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2 posted 2003-04-15 11:37 PM


No not really, i shift around but Im always in the dark. Was meant to let off some steam, but it sounded very cruel at the end.
MellonCollie
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3 posted 2003-04-17 05:46 PM


Hey, thats a great poem, I like the evil ending!!!

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

IcyFlamez89
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4 posted 2003-04-17 07:26 PM


Thanx, hope you voted, lollz
qtpieelmo
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Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
5 posted 2003-04-17 08:17 PM


Lol--I love this, the ending is great!! This definatel gets my vote!!


ELMO

tornskirt
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6 posted 2003-04-19 08:34 PM


i love the ending

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

[This message has been edited by tornskirt (04-19-2003 08:35 PM).]

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7 posted 2003-05-06 10:00 AM


This reminds me of a Chinese saying.... literally translated to mean "a good horse does not return to the pasture that it has left previously". In some way, it's good, coz it'll save your pride in times such as this.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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