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MellonCollie
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since 2003-04-11
Posts 117
Austria,Europe

0 posted 2003-04-13 06:45 PM


this one is about my dad...


you where my hero when i was young
i loved you when i was a child
but years ago
you left
and my feelings for you died

well,
not all of them
still hate remains
and will never vanish
you were one of the reasons
when i cut my veins

we always were friends
and you still hope we are
but i can't be your friend
for in my mind
you left this scar

sometimes i wish i could love you again
but when i think of what happened
i loose my thoughts
and without dread
i wish you were dead

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

© Copyright 2003 Simon - All Rights Reserved
qtpieelmo
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
1 posted 2003-04-13 08:55 PM


Wow!!
This is very dark, The strong feelings u have about your father!! I love how this is written tho, & I hope someday u can find the love again!!! Great job here!! I love your words, they keep me wanting to know more!! Write more soon!!!


ELMO

MellonCollie
Member
since 2003-04-11
Posts 117
Austria,Europe
2 posted 2003-04-14 04:17 AM


Thanx Elmo...i felt better after writing this particular poem...and it's great that somebody understands my feelings and words...

how will i laugh tomorrow
when i can't even smile today

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

3 posted 2003-04-14 08:42 AM


I understand MellonCollie....good you could write about it...
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