So Alone - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Darkfire k'Sheyna
Junior Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 26
Maryland, U.S.A.

0 posted 2003-03-29 11:52 AM

I'm alone
So alone
since you left me here
by myself.
No one to share my joys with
No shoulder to cry on
Nothing but emptiness
where you once were.
I'm lost
Bereft of your presence.
My life stretches before me
desolate
lonely
and oh, so achingly
alone.
I can't bear the pain
the raw, gaping wound
left in me when you died.
Why did you leave me here,
so alone?
Come back to me.
I want you, need you
here by my side once more.
Without you
nothing can make me happy again.
You were half my soul
and all of my heart.
Come back, oh please
return to me!
Don't leave me here to walk my life
without you...
So alone.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

1 posted 2003-03-29 03:44 PM

this could be a song!
it has a lot of aching emotion, very painful. Felt it. I hope you are ok.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2003-03-29 04:26 PM

Usually, I don't respond to poetry unless there is a critique message that lets me critique it - yes, you have one but I don't want to critique this - because something in me just responded to the heart-break in this work..and I wanted to let you know that..this aches...

K

[This message has been edited by Severn (03-29-2003 04:27 PM).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2003-03-30 01:38 AM

Nice expression of your feelings...James

SilentFreija
Junior Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 37

4 posted 2003-03-30 05:09 PM

I like poetry that expresses agony, my friends think I'm freaky because of that but anywho, I love it....but, this is just my opinion, I don't like using the word, "oh" more then once in poetry. But don't kill me, just an opinion. Good job! =]

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

5 posted 2003-04-01 12:35 PM

wreching emotion

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

6 posted 2003-04-03 11:59 AM

A heartrending read.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

7 posted 2003-04-04 04:10 PM

Really well written, I can see that you ache inside, and to be honest with you the only tihng that fixes pain is time. Just let yourself overcome things as time slips by, take care, drop me a line sometime.

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.