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since 2003-03-28
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0 posted 2003-03-28 09:28 PM

Within us all is the beauty of the world.

Inside of us, a world we all know.

If this is so,
then why doesn't it ever show?

Are we scared of what they'll think?
Is that the missing link?

Could it ever be,
because our worlds judge differently?

Are we afraid of who we are?
Does this hold us back, or take us far?

Is it possible for us to see,
that other person inside thee?

Could we look into our eyes,
and see the best masters of disguise?

Unmask yourself
and look in awe,
at the person we can see;
everyone and all.

© Copyright 2003 Dance - All Rights Reserved
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since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
1 posted 2003-03-29 01:27 AM

It's not easy to let someone see you inside sometimes especially if they'd get upset and/or wouldn't understand!!!! Nice piece!!!

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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2 posted 2003-03-29 12:10 PM

Hi and welcome to PIP! I am sure you will have a great time in our forums. If you need anything do not hesitate to contact a moderator.

ps: check your e-mail for a suprise!

Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Krystopher Morris
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130
Ancient land called Chivalry
3 posted 2003-04-03 03:02 PM

Wow! What an awsome poem! Thanks a whole bunch for sharing! Major insperation here!
Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
4 posted 2003-04-03 04:23 PM

very good work.  Although...

I looked inside someone once - kinda gross really... intestines, liver, kidney... yeah pretty gross.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

since 2003-03-07
Posts 92

5 posted 2003-04-04 04:14 PM

This poem had an amazing rhyme scheme to it,  nice job.  Writing about mis judgement is a good topic as well, drop me a line sometime if you dont mind
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since 2000-07-04
Posts 989
Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY
6 posted 2003-04-04 04:47 PM

I luv this--its so true--it's hard to let people in sometimes!!! I hope to see more like this soon!!!


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since 2000-12-17
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Portland, Oregon
7 posted 2003-04-05 05:18 PM

Yay!!! Oh Dance, I am so happy you're here, dearest friend, Welcome to Passions! I believe it is important to reveal the beauty of your heart to the world and be yourself by all means as only there will we find that joy out there and avoid confusion! (big hugggsssssss) Yay, I can't wait to see more of your wonderful poems here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dance, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."


Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
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On A Journey To The Unknown
8 posted 2003-04-06 09:02 AM

Welcome to passions! Yes, it is indeed so hard sometimes to let get close to us.
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since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647
9 posted 2003-04-07 12:24 PM

Well done!
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240
10 posted 2003-04-09 08:51 PM

Very interesting read here. Liked the pattern of it, nice.

Love reading all these great writes.
I write not!

Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745
California Desert
11 posted 2003-04-10 04:49 PM

Good - thanks for sharing.
Junior Member
since 2003-04-11
Posts 16
Northumberland, England
12 posted 2003-04-11 05:58 PM

I liked this a lot, though I feel the use of 'thee' and maybe the last two lines let it down, but well done.
Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624
Florida USA
13 posted 2003-04-12 07:52 PM

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love

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