Dark Poetry #3 |
How people see you in life. |
Dance Junior Member
since 2003-03-28
Posts 34 |
Within us all is the beauty of the world. Inside of us, a world we all know. If this is so, then why doesn't it ever show? Are we scared of what they'll think? Is that the missing link? Could it ever be, because our worlds judge differently? Are we afraid of who we are? Does this hold us back, or take us far? Is it possible for us to see, that other person inside thee? Could we look into our eyes, and see the best masters of disguise? Unmask yourself and look in awe, at the person we can see; everyone and all. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
It's not easy to let someone see you inside sometimes especially if they'd get upset and/or wouldn't understand!!!! Nice piece!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Hi and welcome to PIP! I am sure you will have a great time in our forums. If you need anything do not hesitate to contact a moderator. ps: check your e-mail for a suprise! -majnu |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Wow! What an awsome poem! Thanks a whole bunch for sharing! Major insperation here! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
very good work. Although... I looked inside someone once - kinda gross really... intestines, liver, kidney... yeah pretty gross. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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LastMoments Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 92 |
This poem had an amazing rhyme scheme to it, nice job. Writing about mis judgement is a good topic as well, drop me a line sometime if you dont mind |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
I luv this--its so true--it's hard to let people in sometimes!!! I hope to see more like this soon!!! ELMO |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Yay!!! Oh Dance, I am so happy you're here, dearest friend, Welcome to Passions! I believe it is important to reveal the beauty of your heart to the world and be yourself by all means as only there will we find that joy out there and avoid confusion! (big hugggsssssss) Yay, I can't wait to see more of your wonderful poems here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dance, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Welcome to passions! Yes, it is indeed so hard sometimes to let get close to us. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Well done! |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
Very interesting read here. Liked the pattern of it, nice. Love reading all these great writes. |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Good - thanks for sharing. |
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sister3of4 Junior Member
since 2003-04-11
Posts 16Northumberland, England |
I liked this a lot, though I feel the use of 'thee' and maybe the last two lines let it down, but well done. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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