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PoetOfDarkness2002
Junior Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 41
Lost in my dissociative unrealistic world

0 posted 2003-01-19 09:59 PM

My View On Life

I'm stuck in this life
This life I hate
Want to leave, no open gates
I despise this world
This world of hate
But living and suffering is my fate.

I constantly break down into peices
I feel like I'm forever stuck in these dark lonely places
Want to go, No way out
Please someone tell me how!

Why does life have to be so tough?
Cant you tell I've had enough?
Want to disappear, can't take no more
How much pain can one endure?

When will it end?
This game I play
I'm tired of doing things
The devils way.

Want to give up. end the fight
Tired of not being able to sleep at night
Numb and gone, Mentally dead
This is what's happened to my head.

I need the hospital, can you tell?
I need it bad, i'm not doing well
I hate my life, I hate myself
But most of all I hate the problems I've been dealt.

I am sorry for everything I did wrong
I just dont feel like i can go on.

Love Always,
Manda aka POD

"Because I could not stop for death he kindly stopped for me, the carriage held but just ourselves and immortality."

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-01-20 12:05 PM

Great poem! Whoa, you couldn't have said it better. ~Jess

"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding." -Nicholas Sparks

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

2 posted 2003-01-20 12:30 PM

Interesting read, hope that it was more 'lies' than 'truth' for no one should hate themselves or their lives that much. One consolation, when you are on the bottom the only direction for you to go is UP.

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

3 posted 2003-01-20 03:41 PM

Very mixed feelings on this piece. I found so many cliches in there, or lines that just lacked impact. But then the next line would knock me down, only to read further and be disappointed again. I'm almost afraid to say it's a flaw because you couldn't have done it better on purpose! Maybe one of those lucky mistakes.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

4 posted 2003-01-20 07:14 PM

Very powerful read here.

Well done

Hold you head up, the sun shines bright upon the beautiful

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

PoetOfDarkness2002
Junior Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 41
Lost in my dissociative unrealistic world

5 posted 2003-01-20 11:20 PM

Thank you all for your replies....i'm not quite sure if its truth or lies....some of it is what i face everyday and some is just how i felt when i wrote it....i dont actually sit there for hours thinkin bout the right words or how to make it ryme...what i write comes from my heart and its kinda weird cuz as of now i only have one poem that doesnt ryme...i guess i just like ryming....thanks again!

Love Always,
Manda aka POD

"Because I could not stop for death he kindly stopped for me, the carriage held but just ourselves and immortality."

Chameleon
Member

since 2002-08-07

Posts 99
Australia

6 posted 2003-01-21 08:52 AM

i really appreciate this, as much as i can appreciate a half empty glass of milk.

PoetOfDarkness2002
Junior Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 41
Lost in my dissociative unrealistic world

7 posted 2003-01-22 07:17 PM

what exactly is that supposed to mean? but anyways ty for your comment...

Love Always,
Manda aka POD

"Because I could not stop for death he kindly stopped for me, the carriage held but just ourselves and immortality."

Sauteed In Sanity
Junior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 12
NC, USA

8 posted 2003-01-26 12:21 PM

I have been there at the bottom too. This poem brings back memories from darker times.

I love the halted movement, and the stunted rhyme. They seem to add weight where you wanted it, and also keep the message raw.

peace
New Member

since 2003-01-21

Posts 5

9 posted 2003-01-27 01:15 AM

I totally understand your poem I have had to face the dark side too.

I think writing down how you feel really helps

I think what you wrote came from deep within
and it was really powerful.

I look forward on reading more of your poems

PoetOfDarkness2002
Junior Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 41
Lost in my dissociative unrealistic world

10 posted 2003-01-27 02:01 AM

thank you

Love Always,
Manda aka POD

"I was gonna kill the most beautiful, wonderful person in the alive, but then I realized suicide is a crime."

"Every

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