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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-01-13 12:51 PM

Uncertain verse came in a dream
of now empty pastures.
As I walked the spattered field:
"We will die as sheep."
Said by one I'd never seen.
How could I trust his eyes?

How do you temper savage beauty,
against a cast iron moon?
Shape her light to stab the dark,
a certain glow for certain ends?
Their howls sent up something fierce.
I dropped to stone, overcome.

Sitting in the midnight grit,
I pressed closer to cold rock.
I could hear a muffled beat.
Was it my heart? Did the ground speak?
I lifted my head to find the man dead.
He wore no boots. He had scars on his feet.

I saw the wolf at his throat.
Tawny gray but for white teeth,
lake green eyes, a mouth of roses
dripping seeds that spread to petals.
I felt the breath before the strike
of the one behind me.

Low sounds went up to the sky
closer, and closer, moving from me
as I turned into a point
of spreading calm and freezing heat.
My head lay against the stone.
Was it my heart? Did the ground speak?

Savage beauty tempered none.
Cast out moon stabbed at the dark.
Lightning shaped to certain glows.
Certain ends as the wind rose.
Sitting in the midnight grit,
I pressed closer to cold rock.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (01-13-2003 01:48 PM).]

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2003-01-13 03:11 PM

How do you temper savage beauty,
against a cast iron moon?
Shape her light to stab the dark,
a certain glow for certain ends?
Their howls sent up something fierce.
I dropped to stone, overcome.
==================================
I saw the wolf at his throat.
Tawny gray but for white teeth,
lake green eyes, a mouth of roses
dripping seeds that spread to petals.
I felt the breath before the strike
of the one behind me.
===========================
Savage beauty tempered none.
Cast out moon stabbed at the dark.
Lightning shaped to certain glows.
Certain ends as the wind rose.
Sitting in the midnight grit,
I pressed closer to cold rock.
==============================

damn...that was some dream...intense, haunting write Mike...awesome imagery.
love the way you tied the 2nd and last verse together...very cool groovy guy.

It's over long before her fall from grace, she's never been this far from safe.
Trying to see where it all began, she'll never be the same again.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2003-01-13 03:13 PM

To tell the truth, only the first stanza came from the dream. The rest was made up on the spot. There is something very wrong with my head.

Thanks, Janet!

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

3 posted 2003-01-13 10:31 PM

This is really great work, Mike.
A savage Gothic tale to chill the blood of any canis lupus afficianado.
They have been reintroduced to "The Greater Yellowstone Ecosystem" ya know?
A word to the wise:
Don't go backpackin' Yallerstone 'thout a shootin' iron in yer paws.
Loved it.
Thanks,

coyote

"The greatest of all faults is to be conscious of none."
Thomas Carlyle

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

4 posted 2003-01-14 11:36 AM

Wow. You always amaze me.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2003-01-14 12:14 PM

Thank you both. I intended no great message in this poem -- it's more just written like "stuff that happened" in a dream.

Thanks for reading it.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2003-01-14 11:11 PM

Mike,
Now I want to howl - in envy - in sympathy, who knows.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

7 posted 2003-01-16 06:23 PM

absolutely amazing, a hardcore poem here.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2003-01-16 06:31 PM

Thank you both. The strangest part of this dream -- when I woke up I felt warm and comforted, despite all the violence...

Me gots problems with mine head, I thinks.

devina
Member Elite

since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

9 posted 2003-01-21 07:54 PM

OH how I missed you Mikey boy...haven't had a good read in months with this time consuming job...*ack*

and this?
"I saw the wolf at his throat.
Tawny gray but for white teeth,
lake green eyes, a mouth of roses
dripping seeds that spread to petals.
I felt the breath before the strike
of the one behind me."

I can picture clear the sired words...so I think we shall be crazily demented together...(loved that stanza btw)

take care you....and? email the princess would you??')

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

10 posted 2003-01-25 12:42 PM

Brilliant write!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2003-01-27 01:19 PM

DEVINA!

How's it going? What's up? Glad you're back! E-mail sent.

Spirit, thank you.

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