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Tragedy |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA 
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How bittersweet, this tragedy Destroyed in my stupidity Or maybe it's the therapy To cure this mental disease But I'm content to fall asleep As long as I don't dream I shouldn't be alive Just another born to die A single, lonely soul to cry Watch the hours crawling by While hope fades from my eyes And emptiness eats me inside So say you care as if it's true Like I can put my faith in you Bandage the crimson, corroded bruise Promising something happy and new Shackle me to reality Shake me until I awake Smile into my abysmal face To watch my spirit break I love you and here I lay Here I stay But you've gone away Okay If you want it that way I am only a thing to betray ~Shadow Shay~ "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hi again, Shay. Just like yesterday's comments, I find this one to be more a placeholder for some great rhythms and musical language. You have the ache and the rhythm and the ideas down well. I look forward to the point when you reach out hard and far, and your words begin to match your structure and music. Mike |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Thank you. I'm looking forward to that too. I think being in a community with writers like yourself will be a great help. It's been so hard to find inspiration elsewhere, and especially hard to find someone whose writing I can look up to. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Erowyna, Anymore heartache and I would have cried. bsquirrel is right, this does have a cadence that reaches out. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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