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akira
Member

since 2002-07-13

Posts 79
Idaho

0 posted 2003-01-09 03:22 PM

Scared and alone
Lost and miserable
Tortured and persecuted

Can you identify with me?
Can you understand me?
Can you help me?

Hurt and abandoned
Abused and torn
Desolate and misserable

No one to help me
No one to reach me
No one to understand me
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written by akira
copyright 2002

Akira
www.poetrypoems.com/akira
http://briefcase.yahoo.com/karianna_destiny
Akiras_Fire@hotmail.com

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

1 posted 2003-01-09 03:35 PM

ahh I love that!!! I got ur mail, I will reply sometime lol, Sounds like we need to get to know eachother..I love this peice..keep writing!

"Water Over Matter"

akira
Member

since 2002-07-13

Posts 79
Idaho

2 posted 2003-01-09 03:38 PM

thanks....

Akira
www.poetrypoems.com/akira
http://briefcase.yahoo.com/karianna_destiny
Akiras_Fire@hotmail.com

Barbara Trautman
Member

since 2002-10-23

Posts 90

3 posted 2003-01-10 09:33 PM

I'm always concerned that poets being the creative people they are I will believe what they have written only to learn it was an exercise of their artistic talents. But, I must say this is the kind of poem that touches my heart because I have been there and felt that. It was very poignant and touched me deeply. No criticism. Barbara

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

4 posted 2003-01-12 11:55 AM

Akira, huh? Have you ever seen the movie?

About the poem. Erm... wasn't really nuts about it. It obviously sprouts from genuine emotion, but doesn't seem to reach out and make you feel it. It's just kinda there, and you have to choose to associate yourself.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

ForGetMeNot087
Junior Member

since 2002-12-08

Posts 15

5 posted 2003-01-12 06:33 PM

Wow that is a great poem, I was greatly moved by it. Keep writing.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

6 posted 2003-01-13 10:22 PM

i like the fact that you just opened up providing this is in fact about yourself,
and put it out there, cool

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

7 posted 2003-01-14 11:00 PM

akira,
this made me feel pain - real or not
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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