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Dark Poetry #3

What Goes Wrong

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

0 posted 2002-09-25 04:07 AM

Air stings the lungs
Light burns the eyes
No concept of conscience
Loving all and hating none
No blame or bitterness
Limitless potential
An angel for a second
Falling from grace
With each passing moment
Crying with the terror of revelation
What goes wrong
When a child is born

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

1 posted 2002-09-25 06:42 AM

amazing, this is such a clever poem, so eloquently put, well done!

Anya

[This message has been edited by anya (09-25-2002 06:42 AM).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-25 02:28 PM

At first I thought this was about someone in a burning aircraft.
Then I slammed into the end and read it again.

Oooh, dark, sad wit at play here, Zall.

As Karilea would say, a keeper!

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

3 posted 2002-09-26 11:37 AM

Thanks guys,

Dont know what I was thinking that night!

Zall

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