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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
13th century thoughts I have seen the round of the Mystery plays From Adam and Eve to Judgement Day How God is harsh and grants no pardon Driving sinners both out from his garden How on the sounding of that last call The graves will open and out they crawl Why even the dead must pay the debts Face Gods judgement with full regrets But I am poor and have no chance to sin The ox must be fed and the crops gathered in Piers the Ploughman must walk in his furrow As he did yesterday,today and again tomorrow Only the rich and idle can afford to sin Gods harsh judgements is for noble men You cannot afford to be druken and lewd When you are broken and thirsty and hungry for food So perhaps I am lucky to be both hungry and poor They cannot sin who can only endure arthur sept 02 mystery plays -scripture stories played for the unlettered poor .Standard set items in which gesture,mime and costume(mask) were as importent as words |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I love it. Very nicely done. This is certainly a perspective I've not heard before. Unique. Enjoyed!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"So perhaps I am lucky to be both hungry and poor They cannot sin who can only endure" Enjoyed this one Arthur...totally different concept. ~Hugs across the pond~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a very nicely written poem, with much *cynical* insight. I am very impressed with all of it. I especially liked how this line reflected quite the ammount of cynicism toward the often corrupt "Christian" leaders and kings of the time Only the rich and idle can afford to sin Gods harsh judgements is for noble men though I would not have placed the s in judgements, however, I do not believe that it takes away from your talent as a poet. How on the sounding of that last call The graves will open and out they crawl You might have written "...and out they'll crawl." This would not have affected the rhythm of your poem. You do a wonderful job holding up your iambic rhythm. It seems to be a cross between iambic pentameter and tetrameter. In any case, aside from the few grammatical mistakes, this poem demonstrates a good use of technique. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Really fine, arthur my friend. One, I wish I had written. Hey! you're gettin pretty good at this! ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
dear fractal007 thank you for the constuctive comment I have a horrible habit of finishing a poem and then submitting it immediately.Of course later one can see much room for improvement.(time instead of chance /afford and due instead of full regret) I am the first to admit my grammer and spelling are weak .Always were alas. Glad you picked up the reference to Langdons Piers Ploughman .I was hoping some one would arthur |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Neatly done with a whole new propective  loved it tho.If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Arthur ... What can I add? |
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