Dark Poetry #3 |
The Session |
WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Begging freedom from oppression allowing self some expression maybe even wicked confession still trapped fighting depression social banishment slipped, regression caused by tyranny lost impression. WhiteRose |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
I must say that you are quite good at *cramming* words into small spaces and still using them effectively. You were able to carry on your usage of words ending with "ession"-type sounds without making the poem sound too phony or list-like. The whole thing flows like any other sentence, only with the almost subtly inserted ession words. Great job. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
You’ve packed a lot into this, and done it well, enjoyed the read! |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
liked it thanks arthur |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
just to echo what the others have said really, you said so much in so few words here, that is such a skill, well done Anya |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I don't find it crammed. I find it speaking from a place where it all must come out lest the subject expire. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Not crammed, more of an expulsion. A stream of conviction. You (and nameless others)write poetry faster than I can reply. So, my apologies to you (and them) for slacking. I am reading though ~wranx |
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Silent_nights New Member
since 2002-09-16
Posts 6Dreamland,WI |
I think thats a good poem... Expesses much of how you feel... I like it |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done.. Enjoyed the rhythm. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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