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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
Mona It is a far place, and a lonely place. The grass is sharp,blade spear. Dune winds obliterate all trace, of the seasons and the years. Our way is to Holy island, Where once men went to pray. Lost now in the shifting sands, The route of the pilgrims way. Toppled stones of an ancient shrine, Walls open to the winds. Old before the Normans came, A place for those who sinned. And before that,long well before. The Druid by his silent pool Looked deep and dimly saw The coming Roman rule. This is where we hire. Our small and cowled band. Carrying my love on her bier, White flowers in her hand. The old one waits by the water side An ancient haggarded witch. Only a veil t'wixt life and death, Tonight that veil will twitch. The sacred words are said, The funeral rights are read. Lay my love in her watery grave, Gone but perhaps not dead. I will sit by the pool tonight. And watch the stars in there turn. Before the coming morning light, My love may yet return. arthur sept 02 Mona is the correct name for angelssey Once the centre and university of the pan -european druid cult.You can still sit by the sacred pool.If you know where to find it |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Arthur~This has to be one of your best, if not the best write I have seen from you. Fantastic imagery...you took me there.. I know you have visited here many times.. perhaps you could tell us more in verse.. or perhaps prose even. Enjoyed this ever so much!! Thank you for this keeper. ~Hugs across the pond, Nancy~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yes definately this is going into my library! I'm such a sucker for such things... Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
I cannot honestly describe the intense and sad imagery that poured into my mind as I read this. This piece is incredible. Your work is beautiful! |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
thank you one and three arthur |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
an ancient mood created and longed for? I like this idea I've been trying to come up with something similar but, nothing... bravo arthur brian |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Arthur, With this poem, we're all sitting nearby. Mike |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is a beautiful poem. I am not very knowledgeable in history, and so I am glad you put the little note at the end. The poem's pilgrimage reminds me somewhat of Chaucer's Cantabury[sp] Tales. I am most certainly adding this piece to my library. I am somewhat puzzled, however, by the following lines: I will sit by the pool tonight. And watch the stars in there turn. Is the speaker watching the stars throughout the night as they "turn" about the sky[which would make "their" spelled wrong] or is there some other meaning to this requiring that you use the word "there"? "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus [This message has been edited by fractal007 (09-13-2002 08:49 PM).] |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
sorry fractal007 my english is not as good as should be what is he doing i wonder lets ask him "I am watching the stars move across the sky to serve as my clock" as for the writer he never could understand the difference between there and thier so thanks arthur |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Ah, IC. Interesting way of replying. lol, you are quite creative. As for the difference between there and their, one is a pronoun, while the other is a posessive pronoun. One talks of a place that exists somewhere, as in "let's go there", while the other talks of an object that a group of people possess, as in "their country is filled with hoodlums and theives." Hope that helps. Also, their and there is probably one of the most common errors people make. I often make it myself.  "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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