Dark Poetry #3 |
Caressing the Thorns |
WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
This morning I woke to darkness haunted by remnants of those lonely hours tapers reduced to wax dried on brass Soft wilted petals of a solitary rose with blood red thorns where they hit their mark I tried to coax my mind to drift but its grasp on the reality of things burned my throat like the harsh flavor of spirits with owed criticisms and "should haves" plaguing my every thought I slipped on my shoes and robe and outside I picked up the shears to pluck a new rose This time I was careful not to snub the thorns I selected fresh candles and peeled the wax from the shiny brass holders And there I sat still dressed from the previous night with a corked bottle placating my nervous thoughts "Tonight" he'll return with soft words and tender kisses Tonight I'm sure of it |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
Brava, dear, yet again! your poetry is riveting. Annika:- "Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?' |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Nice work, Well written and sorrowful, Zall |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
T'would be foolish for one not to return to such a lovely, gardener. This is wonderful, yet again. ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
H. Beyond reproach or reprieve. Just ... beautiful. Mike |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
a lonely wanting sit this mmm brian |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
yes...hauntingly beautiful as usual.. Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Thanks for reading and the kind replies... DeaDiAmore |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is quite a good poem. You've done a very good job incorporating symbolism and imagery here and allowing them to recur without a recurring structure, as so many poems here do. The constant image of alcoholic beverages and roses makes for some nice symbolism here. You've done a great job conveying the idea that life experiences, like roses, aren't all perfect, but have their thorns. The narrative flows beautifully in this poem. I will most certainly put it in my library. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Thank you for reading and the kind reply...You boosted my ego....thanks. DeaDiAmore |
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