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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
Darkness fills the world around me I continue on, oblivious I am lost in my thoughts I block out my memories I struggle to forget the past I crave a better life Silence surrounds me But I am screaming now Screaming, crying, dying I want out of this world But I cannot escape Still, there must be an exit My past continues to haunt me I did nothing wrong Nothing, except live The wind rips at my face Steady rain falls, my chilled feeble body Yet I move on, struggling My laughter fills the air My tears fall to the floor Memories refuse to abandon me My whole world fills my mind Friends, family, always there I have left them, looking for an out The sky is pure black in colour I am unaware of the cold I stop then, afraid to continue My life that I left flashes before me But I am going to move on I have found my escape I close my eyes, and gently release In the silence of the night, I slip away Away, to a better world |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
hang in there, DeG writing, to me is sometimes like vomiting the sickness fills and you have to release and then? you feel better hope this did it for you good write goooood right? brian |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
DEG We all feel powerless sometimes its hard to accept it I know. I feel that a man although a seemingly insignificant speck in the universe, has the power to make a difference if he has the force of will. Good Write, Zall |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
DEG, It's never as bad as all that. It just seems so. Check out my old poetry if you dare. Talk about a fool's journey.  Mikey |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Very nice work....enjoyed much. DeaDiAmore |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
The leap is from pain to peace Leaving a world that no longer allows the concept of hope and yet and yet slowly but surely you can learn to "let go" accept and move on nicely written by the way arthur |
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Harmony Junior Member
since 2002-09-12
Posts 27GB |
Good poetry, quite powerful too, i understand where you are coming from with this and can relate to it very much. In time you will learn to see things in a different light its a case of taking hold of the past and looking at it accepting it and moving on but this is not an easy process. I am still learning to deal with my own past and it is not easy. take care |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
A good poem, though I found the ending went a bit too abruptly. Your ironic descriptions of your thoughts and actions opposing the world around you are quite good. One must wonder if the speaker truly is oblivious to the darkening world around him. Perhaps the darkness is secretly furthering the situation. Anyway, this is a good poem. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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