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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-09-10 06:00 PM

She is a rose
dried to a book,
the ghost of oil's
unread fragrance.

The queen sips her wine.
(which you offered to her)
She looks tired in her eyes.
Tears are trapped behind the glass.

Shining.

And you whisper poison lips,
and a lotus smile.

She stops sipping, shineless.
Her hair falls forward on the stair.
Sometimes a reason why.
Is this a crown to a new light?

Rotting an apple backward,
filagree touch distended.
Shh, your majesty. I love your idea.
And so from hence goodnight.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-09-10 06:04 PM

ah...

just ah...

this read like a portrayal of the kiss of a dying bloom, petals falling still wet from lips...

totally, totally lovely, and? as the last poem I read tends to run through my mind? smile, this one is it for me this day.

Perfection.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-09-10 06:09 PM

Thank you, Sen. I should probably pack it in for the day, too. Goodnight, all! (at 3:09 p.m. ... at *work*!!!)

Mikey

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

3 posted 2002-09-10 07:31 PM

wow
has
an undercurrent
of ominous
to me
(a little nagger)
but beautiful
seems almost like from the
Dias...sp? dream epic?

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2002-09-10 07:37 PM

oh yeah!

*smiles*
~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

News_From_Nowhere
Member

since 2002-06-14

Posts 173
CU, NY

5 posted 2002-09-10 09:58 PM

"the ghost of oil's unread fragrance"
And this!!
"Rotting an apple backward,
filagree touch distended. "
Incredible analogous wording!
Absolutely loved this one!

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

6 posted 2002-09-11 03:59 AM

Great poetry again MC

Zall

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-09-11 12:56 PM

brian,
It seems to be a link between
One deck later and
Diastonene. (how, I'm not sure)

Tier,
Thank you.

NFN,
I'm glad you liked the words in this.
They took a few tries to think of.

Zall,
Thanks.

Mike

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

8 posted 2002-09-11 02:22 PM

Dang this is great!!!!!

H.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-09-11 02:23 PM

Thanks, H.

Feel free to e-mail me anytime.
Um ... I'll do the same.

Mikey

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