Dark Poetry #3 |
Just wrote this... |
D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
This piece is about Alzheimer's, by the way. Definitely need help with this one! >; ) "stranger" A past forgotten Forever to this day I can never go back I simply cannot say Whatever happened then Is far into the past My mind has let it fall Fall silent and fast I can no longer place you In this ocean that I drown Your voice is so familiar As are your tears and frown But I still don't know you So I want you to leave me be You cry out against this "I'm your daughter!Can't you see?" The words you say bruise me No daughter I have had But no longer recalling You tell me I'm going mad I lash out at this point What right you have I don't know Just leave me to myself I say It's the door to you I show I can no longer place you In this ocean that I drown Your voice is so familiar As are your tears and frown [This message has been edited by D edgar Grey (09-07-2002 06:46 PM).] |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Leave it, Its good as it is, I cant make any possitive addition to it. What I normally do is read it through a couple of times, then go away come back and read it some more, and if you still cant think of anything you probably wont. Zall |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
Thanks for the advice! I'll try that and see...Ja. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
D.E.G., I read this as a moment of clarity before sinking back into the sea. Mike |
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