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leafseranade Member
since 2001-07-06
Posts 118Wisconsin, USA |
the kitchen floor a mirror tile sheen the window light dancing in black and white cream back porch adjacent flies dead in the screen cat tail twitches in time to clock beats one two three fast forward the century lonely life now encompased in color tv |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
leafserenade, and once it's encased/entombed in that blue tv light, suddenly its nostalgia, not hell. (or is it?) Loved this poem. Mike |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
I don't know why, but for some reason this piece made me feel lonely and angry, almost as though there was a bit of history that was forever lost...thought-provoking and beautiful! |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Great poem. Very much liked. -Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I too agree with the above comments..enjoyed this immensely  Kristen |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I like this, a lot. As to making it better...I think this one's fine as it is..  K |
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