Dark Poetry #3 |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. ![]() |
From "Untitled" /pip/Forum46/HTML/002516.html Untitled Part 2 The queen was in her treasury room, I say Where she plated my head in gold It was very special to her, you see For I was her very first beheading She never failed to flaunt me off, I say To all her royal guests They gawked and the squawked at me, you see For I was quite the sight She replaced my eyes with glass, I say Centered with fine emeralds She kept me quite clean and polished, you see For I was worth so much She put high on a pedestal, I say And visited me everyday Boy did she have a lot to say, you see For I think she was beginning to feel guilt One day she was feeling mean, I say She came in with a huff and a puff She glared ever so fierce, you see For she had something left to say Her voice rose in anger, I say And she looked me strait in the eye She poked my golden head and said, you see "You are the reason they all hate me!" Well I was not about to take the blame, I say And all the yellin' and a-pokin' I think I frightened the poor dear to death, you see For the last thing she heard was "boo!" -Tanya (Well I thought that the first of this, deserved a second part.I dont know call me strange.I have to admit its not as good as the first, but then again "seconds" of anything normally arent in my opinion.I'd love to hear your thoughts!!!) ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ [This message has been edited by Dragon Mistress (09-02-2002 12:36 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Seems to me, that you had been "mulling over" the first one for a while, before actually writing it down. (editing in your head). Maybe this one would benefit from the same attention. I like it, it just seemed less polished than part I. Keep goin Tanya. Yours, is a different sort of voice in here. ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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since 2000-01-03
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Hey Tanya, When the eyes are glass, tears are trapped behind them. Shining. (sheesh, I keep getting poem ideas!) Mike |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Thank you Wranx! I'll certainly keep that in mind!! Mike, I'm glad that I can inspire you! Or is that a bad thing? Dont wanna be overwhelmed ya know! -One being dragged away to the block (school) in only 19 hours, Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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