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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. 
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Today was not the best of days, I say Because I was accused of a crime. The most horrid of deeds, you see For it was against her noble queen. Her guards dragged me away, I say They shoved me at her feet. Her gaze was frightening, you see For it was as cold as ice. I tried to explain my innocence, I say As she looked me up and down. I pleaded for my head today, you see For it was surely lost. Her screech sent me a-shudder, I say And her cackle left me a-studder And her reply to my pleading was, you see "We shall see, foolish mortal, we shall see." I was shaking in my boots, I say As I bowed and said my thanks I told my queen that she was kind, you see For I wanted to keep my head. I bowed one last time, I say Before I ventured to the door. Shame I never made it there, you see For her gaurds took me away. No today was not the best, I say They carried me to the block Today was most hideous, you see For the last thing I heard was "chop." -Tanya (this one isnt like my normal writes.But I was feeling rather creative.And the two main characters [the queen and the accused crook] have been playing in my mind for quite a long time.I hope you enjoy!) ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
and you have outlined both carectors well. I enjoyed much. If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Dragon Miss, I like the way this reads. Not quite a "call and response" sort of piece, but has that feel. Also, it has an "Alice through the lookind glass" thing goin' on. ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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Zall Member
since 2002-08-25
Posts 214London, England |
Just like Wranx Alice through the looking glass sprung to mind Good Work DM Zall |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Tanya, Alice through broken glass. Loved the finality.  Mike |
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Dragon Mistress Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 289Washington, USA. |
Thank you all. I suppose you're right, it does have that Alice througth the looking glass kinda feel to it. I didnt realize so as I was writing! Thanks once again for all of your comments!! -Tanya ~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~ |
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