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Dustin462 Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 23Selah, WA |
Ask yourself this question Who is the enemy? If you answered yourself You are correct We are the real enemys We make the criminal angry We push them over the edge And once they're over the edge They change They get angry They Break They bust But most of all they hurt Both innocent people and themselves Their life goes down the drain Why you ask? Because of us Dustin [This message has been edited by Dustin462 (08-11-2002 02:43 PM).] |
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paper doll Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 133Floating on Uncertainty |
Self loathing poems are interesting. You have an interesting idea here but it is in the basic stage. You should really open it up, explore the topic and make it jump off the page. You've got a few spelling errors in there too so perhaps read it through and fix them up.  Thanks for posting. ~M Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality. |
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Chameleon Member
since 2002-08-07
Posts 99Australia |
interesting read indeed. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
i understand what ur saying and its good but like paperdoll said try and open up a bit more. If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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