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Dark Poetry #3

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WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-07-25 06:51 PM

How foolish it was of me
to think the demons would desist
just stop screaming in my head
oh no, they still exist.

Incessant in their wailing
loud in their call
hoping that at last
I will stumble and just fall.

Dark within the walls
of the rooms of my mind
screaming out their pain
with memories unkind.

I'd slay them if I could
put them finally in their grave
but alas, these beasts
have made of me their slave.

WhiteRose

shadowchild458
Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 117
MN,USA

1 posted 2002-07-25 07:23 PM

"Dark within the walls
of the rooms of my mind
screaming out their pain
with memories unkind"

i never really thought of anybody's mind having rooms but yet, that makes a lot of sense. i enjoyed this one greatly as always keep writing and i'll keep reading

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

2 posted 2002-07-25 07:32 PM

I really liked this. Each line was beautiful... never losing the touch.

Keep sharing your talent...
-Sara

"Without you, without you, everything falls apart.
Without you, It's not as much fun to pick up the peices." -NineInchNails

mycafe
Senior Member

since 2002-05-23

Posts 584

3 posted 2002-07-29 01:51 AM

The closing is especially good, WhiteRose.

mycafe

Keep counting your blessings

Syneq
Junior Member

since 2002-07-28

Posts 40

4 posted 2002-07-29 04:35 PM

It is a relief and a bit frightening to find writing you identify with.

Syneq

Disintegrated to materialize in reformed delight.

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