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Encarta Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 101My homeland is not of the world |
Rain by, Matthew What is the rain? Can the sky feel pain? Does it have eyes, From which to cry? Can it see us die? If so, does it sigh? Does it have ears, From which to hear? Can it speak? Of the havoc we reek? With fire we seal our fate With poisoned air we suffocate. We will die, and it's our fault. The process we can no longer halt. With pollution we cut Earth's vein, And it gushes out the rain. I know it's not too good.I was concidering rewritting it, but I don't fell like working on this poem anymore. |
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Necro Draconis Member
since 2000-05-19
Posts 115 |
The poet decides whether to revise or not to revise, and that you did  Good job!If this is reality, I want out. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Can it speak of the havoc we reek... You try to undermine your own work here, and yet Arthur Rimbaud, or even his worshipper Paul Verlaine would idolize you for this line. They both are poignant marks in poetic history, so way to go! I was impressed at the simplistic way of your conveying a point, but not without a few poetic geniuses... Well done. [This message has been edited by Purity (06-02-2002 04:02 AM).] |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
this is sho sho good |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
Ah, the rain ,`tis a mystery to me as well my friend; though you have portrayed it well! ~Rayne For in much wisdom is much grief |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
thank you for you poem arthur |
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