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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-04-16 12:41 PM

The sizzling silence fills the ears,
While drizzling bleeding causes fears;
With brimstone lingers in putrid smell
The broken bones litter the depths of Hell,
Pealing skin make drums left not beat
Reeling in each individual defeat
Needles piece with poison flowing
Another injection and Hell’s growing.

Gloom

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

1 posted 2002-04-16 05:45 PM

I know this is a darker poem, but odd to say ...... I feel like this poem today!!

Excellent write,
Dark

A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 2002-04-17 07:28 AM

Interesting images here...did you intend to spell peeling as pealing? Was that a deliberate pun? I'm assuming so because of the reference to drums...although bells tend to peal, and drums don't..hmm...you know what I mean right? lol...

very dark read...it's nearly the witching hour here so perhaps it's fitting..

K

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2002-04-17 07:29 AM

Thank you, Dark Kisses,
This darkness is actually just a response to another poem,
The other poem was on another site,
that poem here would have been deleted.
Glad you liked this.

Gloom

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

4 posted 2002-04-17 07:36 AM

Thank you, Severn,
Yes the word was deliberate, being a response
I took the words of the poem,
“the insertion’s sound peals in penetration”
I hope you have a gentler brew than this is written about,
Pleased you liked.

Gloom

hush
Senior Member

since 2001-05-27

Posts 1653
Ohio, USA

5 posted 2002-04-24 10:47 PM

Yeah, I'm digging "pealing"... neat double entendre.

"deeper is life than lose: higher than have
-but beauty is more each than living's all"
-E.E. Cummings

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

6 posted 2002-04-25 09:43 AM

Gloom,
I liked the darkness and the double entendre.
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

MIdsummerRain
Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 175
St. Louis, Missouri

7 posted 2002-05-25 12:05 PM

"...The sizzling silence fills the ears, While drizzling bleeding causes fears;..."

Amazing Imagery, Beautiful yet Haunting poem... ~Rayne

For in much wisdom is much grief
& he who increases knowledge
increases sorrow...
Eccl. 1:18

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