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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2002-12-09 12:25 PM


Awkward Positions

I wonder if this is all
part of the plan.
Will you treat me like this
when I'm a married man?
Starved for love.
Starved for attention.
You're putting me into
an awkward position.
Can I trust that in the future
things will get better?
Enough, enough, enough of
this stormy weather.

JamesLee
December03
2002

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LADY_DEATH
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since 2002-11-29
Posts 105
Fl
1 posted 2002-12-09 11:08 AM


Thank you for the response to my poem, I never really realized I was this good at writing until my friend had me put one on the internet.but your work is like mine... from the heart.Only a true poet can express
words from the pure source, his heart.I liked this poem.Good Job!


fractal007
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958

2 posted 2002-12-10 12:28 PM


Your poem is short and concise.  At the same time, however, it displays a rather pressing interpretation problem:  Who is being addressed?  The ambiguity here adds a bit of spice to the poem.  On the one hand the speaker could be addressing his own life circumstances or God or some other fate controlling figure.  On the other hand the speaker could be addressing a future marriage partner.

In any case I'll let you make fun of me if you wish for any lack of interpretive skill on my part.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2002-12-11 04:11 AM


Thank you Lady Death and Fracta for responding to this...
I am expressing disappointment, frustration and anger towards a woman that at one time I believed I wanted to marry...but now I am taking a position that I was possibly wrong to consider her for marriage.
James

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