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Dark Poetry #3

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Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2001-09-07 01:29 PM

She walks out of my life
in a hundred different ways,
and all I can do is pretend
that I don't feel the sting
when the door closes behind her.

7/26/2001

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

1 posted 2001-09-07 02:16 PM

Jonas this is very powerful, Sometimes the feelings have poured out so many times before that you don't know what else to do but pretend.

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-09-07 02:39 PM

Short and powerful
well done

Gloom

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

3 posted 2001-09-07 04:37 PM

Ouch... so few words yet powerfull
~Connie~

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

4 posted 2001-09-07 04:48 PM

Jonas,
You must have a PoetZip.exe in your hand.
How can you say so much in four lines?

Congratulations, really.

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

5 posted 2001-09-07 09:32 PM

nice..alot said it a short poem. It has a lot of power in it.
alan

Jonas
Senior Member

since 2000-03-03

Posts 796
Oregon

6 posted 2001-09-09 05:23 PM

Thank you everyone. I enjoy writing shorter pieces. It seems to work best for me.

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