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Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

0 posted 2001-09-04 08:18 AM

Empty Dreams

Arms open
nothing there

Eyes searching
wonder where

Heart beating
lonely sound

Spirit quests
all around

Night coming
darkness falls

Empty dreams
loveless calls

Come on live my nitemare
Be a part of my nitemare

Darkness creeps in
bringing the dread

Stealing my breath
waking my dead

Giving in to pressures undue
The end is quickly coming into view

Losing yet another dream
So much pain I can’t scream

Maybe I should just go
Hell who would know

Just let my pain quietly flourish
I get enough grief to make it flourish

Come on live my nitemare
Be a part of my nitemare

Give up your dreams
Throw away your plans and schemes

Give up on what makes you feel alive
Kill the good let evil strive

What your friends turn away
Never hearing from them for many a day

Not wanting any part of your life to share
But saying I truly care

I won’t cry
As I watch a number of dreams die

I’ll just walk into forgotten
So as not to turn your life rotten

Come on live my nitemare
Be a part of my nitemare

icyheart

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

1 posted 2001-09-04 09:57 PM

WOW. Alan, this is POWERFUL

Empty dreams
Loveless calls

I've heard that more than a few times

I really, really like this

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2001-09-04 10:21 PM

Alan,

This has a catchy flow to it and is a very solemn purge of emotions, I do relate and hope that happiness will arrive soon for you. Take care!

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-09-08 08:07 PM

simple but quite intense...power packed...i liked how you did the repitition worked VERY nicely.

if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry-

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

4 posted 2001-09-08 08:23 PM

Tracey..thank you..it was just a bad time in my life.

Melissa..i am ok.. don't worry your sweet heart about me.

Albert..thank you sir. I wasn't sure what anyone would think of the repititions..

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

5 posted 2001-09-08 08:41 PM

Very Good!!!! I can relate to thease feelings
... can be in the sence of many differant things too...
~Connie~

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

6 posted 2001-09-08 08:49 PM

Thank you Connie..I hate the fact that anyone can relate to this but it is a fact of life. Hope it is better for you now.
alan

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

7 posted 2001-09-09 12:13 PM

Wow, I echoe the sentiments, very powerful, the part that really got me was the repetitive come on share my nite mare, if one were to feel the darkness that hovers at times would they understand then? excellent write.

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