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Ordinary Child |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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Ordinary Child It’s all in the ordinary, what we taste and discard It’s the basis, the place where we decide who and how to trust I’ve never been comfortable there, commonised, but all searches begin in such a way fixed within myself are my travels, the lines of journey I started slow empty an ordinary child I’ll never return, I’m strange and learned it’s all irrevocable for innocence euphemises ignorance and yes, I’ve lost, it could be called emotively – to suffer and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo? Oh come, you cannot deny you’re covered too you and your ordinary child still held inside © K. Mahony Strokes of ink, words, dreams like Waking mountains make intimate conversations With my shadow From 'Words in the Night' by Jeff Geddes |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is beautiful K, very deep. You're a pretty remarkable ordinary child my dear  Excellent work from you as usual K, it is great to read you again Maree I need a lullaby a kiss goodnight Angel sweet love of my life Oh, I need this ~Natalie Merchant~ |
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a-alibaster Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 392 |
Yes, this certianly threw a ringer in my non-thinking day, but am glad! Seems I always strived to NOT be the ordinary child... I enjoyed this morning read very much! Until...ali< !signature--> "There is an alter ego which dwells in every soul..." a-alibaster "I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less, I am tears of pain, tears of Death. [This message has been edited by a-alibaster (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
Whirlwind life how we manage to absorb the typhoon yet always unattaining the eye of serenity calming mile slashing winds rain down 'pon anviled hearts do lie beneath halos razor edged and yet a moment awakens unbidden unasked to cloak within the deluge all that life has wrought light from nowhere and everywhere simultaneous synchronicity shadows flee they no longer have a meaning the child steps out mighty and mischievious birthed in hearts blood true but smiling at the dawn unashamedly believing tomorrows truth |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I enjoyed the poem, expressed well in short phrases. Gloom |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo?" Love that line Kamla ... this was a wonderful thought provoking read, very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
We are all ordinary people who on occasion manage something extraordinary--- you more often than most.< !signature--> Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 01-10-2001).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo?" Enjoyed reading your poem..James |
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insanepoet New Member
since 2001-01-11
Posts 3Springfield, Ohio, USA |
Hey, I really liked this. I don't stop in and read a lot of poetry which is selfish I know...but I followed this one til the end. It was a great read. Yes, I like it, even though you seem to have buried my true user name "firejerm"  For everything I do apologize.Jeremy "Those little slices of death, how I loathe them"-Edgar Allen Poe |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Roo...hon, from one deep one to another - thankyou...lol. We drink from the same deep my friend. Ali - I don't know that any child is ordinary per se - twas just using poetic licence to make my poetic point lol...I have always wondered if ordinary actually exists...I suppose I meant more 'simple' - uninfused by life...I'm glad your morning appreciated the poem, thank you... K - always unattaining...hey, but do you think if we did attain it we'd be happier? Sadly, my friend, I think we'd be bored...lol. That one little cap sticks out a mile btw...heh. And what, L I, might tomorrow's truth be? Are you a seer? LOL..thankyou for your words in this poetic way... Gloom - and thankyou for reading...I try different styles - I seem to be exploring the art of making spaces and falters flow...a paradox, but hey - you have to try right? Kit - hey! Thanks for stopping by...methinks you were checking in. Love that! It's appreciated too...hugs and thanks. J - awwwww...wow. Thank you...I think so too...everyone and the extraordinary. I think you are pretty extraordinary - I mean...your house has survived the Dee Dee storm after all...just! ~grin~ James - glad you enjoyed...I wonder about that line...can a halo be sharp? Thanks I poet - Hmmm. Well, first I will say thankyou. Second - selfish? Ah well..it comes down to time right? And inclination...I don't think it is likely you are selfish at all. Thirdly, your true username I know nothing about. You haven't listed your email so please email me if you wish and tell me what is going on? What do you mean buried? Can you not get in under that name? If any members are banned, or denied temporary access I have absolutely no say in that - it is Ron's department. It might be an idea to write to him also to find out what is happening with Firejerm. K[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 01-12-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm glad I've decided to check the poems out here in DP once again I seen the loss i've suffered by not being around here Your definition of hurt intrigues me as the poem feeds into my imagination kinda like having wings but not the capability to fly  or maybe we choose not too or even to scared all we have to do is learn to I think i'm not making any sense  loving the post I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
i dont have anything particularly original to say in response to your poem. i liked it a lot, especially the line: and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo? yes, i have found that. mmm...extremely good poem. lately my poetry has become extremely bad (hehe) but maybe this will give me a bit of inspiration for something a bit better. nicely done shira |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
i dont have anything particularly original to say in response to your poem. i liked it a lot, especially the line: and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo? yes, i have found that. mmm...extremely good poem. lately my poetry has become extremely bad (hehe) but maybe this will give me a bit of inspiration for something a bit better. nicely done shira |
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He Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 41 |
Well now The day YOU are ordinary the universe would simply implode in tears of blinded mirrors and yes you tell me would love real in Every moment make a difference You tell me my love "Changes" Are We |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
Simply wonderful! I see depth in your painting of words to the page. More please. *thanx*   mYsTiC |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Very well expressed in depth, many I am sure will relate to this, It is very clever Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Library thingie hon..... [This message has been edited by Jamie (edited 03-29-2001).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
LOL I am...just saw this pop up...HUGS YOU... (you like this one eh?) |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This poetry resembles a war that is fought when one does not act in accord with the society and its endless chain of laws. The rythmic tone seems to be a little off. I would suggest that the flowing of your words be like a stream rather than a river(not so choppy). Ronil (Inspiration for my poems is all around me for my muse is my reality.) |
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mc Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 67México |
Hello my friend... WOW!! I just came back and to find with such words makes me feel like I've been lost for so long... I liked it a lot!!! |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"it’s all irrevocable for innocence euphemises ignorance" "and have you found that hurt is a sharp halo?" These are hardly ordinary thoughts. Glad Jamie pulled the thread back up. Thanks. I loved it. "The poet is the priest of the invisible." |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kamla--Very thought filled and thought provoking...yes, halos can be sharp, it all depends on what they're made of...and my child is what keeps me searching. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Thankyou all for reading and replying... Your comments mean much... Xeonex - I understand what you say here...twas designed the way it is though - to produce a certain effect - the one which you picked up on, I suppose it will work for some and not others lol... mc - so GREAT to see you here... Jamie - you're a love aren't you?  K |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
as a matter of fact, yes i am HK>LK There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
VERY deep...and left my thoughts provoked...loved the read,Severn if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take - when thugs cry- |
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Jennis#1 Member
since 2003-07-08
Posts 112IL, Usa |
Wow. Very deep poem. keep on posting. |
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Laoha Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 161Nevada, USA |
Dig this up, fell in love With the words of your Reflection on the ordinary Stuff. |
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