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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
"bitten" when I first beheld your Gothic beauty black hair shimmered like a raven's wing in moonlight your milky skin waxed glowing as if the moon herself were trapped beneath its pallid nakedness your lips bled a vivid red like petals fallen from the funerary rose that lay across your breasts I kissed your sleeping supplication awakening nocturnal eyes whirlpools of endless night whose depths drown the universe and bestow hypnotic peace onyx windows of propitiation concealing a sepulcher of souls thus I was benighted and seduction followed as we made unhallowed love droplets of profane pleasure flowed into rivers of rapture denying fatal interment then you quickened me with an unholy addiction and brought forth my demon of perdition I am the chosen convert our bloods burn as one my will is forsaken I am betrothed to hunger for the forbidden fruits of condemnation your lover your savior crying at your feet for his eternal rest [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
"when I first beheld your Gothic beauty black hair shimmered like a raven?s wing in moonlight your milky skin waxed glowing as if the moon herself were trapped beneath its pallid nakedness your lips bled a vivid red like petals fallen from the funerary rose that lay across your breasts I kissed your sleeping supplication awakening nocturnal eyes whirlpools of endless night whose depths drown the universe and bestow hypnotic peace onyx windows of propitiation concealing a sepulcher of souls" ohhh how these words make me wither into self pity!! lol,most average guys around here couldn't even scrape together half the brain matter needed to write something so beautifuly chilling.*sigh* oh well,i'll dye my hair blacker and move to transylvania,that should do the trick...wonderful wonderful poetry yet again,at this point i think you should really go in my library. samantha much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This went so far over my head it hurt. I usually try to delve within your poetry a bit more than I usually do....but my wee little brain interpreted this to be of some biblical origin? No idea here coyote....I'm confoooozed. Help me out whenever you see fit, friend!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thank you, Samantha.  This one was new ground for me. Treading further and further into the darkness. But, I enjoyed the writing of it very much! Your appreciation means a lot. I am so very pleased you liked it. "I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I." Paul Simon-Kathy's Song [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Javier. Here's a little insight for ya. At your request of course. lol On the surface this is a vampirical rendition, if you will, of a classic tale -"Sleeping Beauty". The prince finally finds his beloved, and wakens her with a kiss, only to find she is numbered among "the children of the night". Yet for "the glory of love", he allows himself to be "turned". However, there are other "deeper currents" here, as well. It parallels the fragility of our "human condition". Speaking to the temptations of forbidden love, the pleasures and addiction that occurs when we give in to them, and the guilt and self torment that always follows. Even deeper, are the "religious undertones", (which btw you didn't miss, so give yourself some credit, O.K.?) Which speak to the heart of a more timeless "human dilemma", for we are all creatures of combination, both spiritual and carnal, whose opposing forces are always struggling for possession of the soul. the old Yin/Yang, Good/Evil, Adam & Eve thing. Enough said? , and thanks for reading and asking, my friend. I appreciate your interest, and again your "wee little mind" deserves more credit than you give it. "I know that I am like the rain. There but for the grace of you go I." Paul Simon-Kathy's Song [This message has been edited by coyote (edited 04-20-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow the explanation was great!!! I really enjoyed this poem....the explanation was perfect for my wee little brain hehe. Thanks! Much appreciated here. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Swamp¤Faeryie Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 393fairyland....of course;) |
you amaze me coyote |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
This was great, the begining was wonderful. -Gin  "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"---NIN |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Intoxicating and adictive.. I understand this and appreciate it very well. You have written this very well in my opinion. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Sammi, Thanks again. You are such a sweetheart. Gin, Thank you for reading. Glad you liked it. Songbird, Thanks for dropping by. Your comments are appreciated. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
lol thanx javier for askin him so i didnt have too cuz i would of felt incredibly 'stupis'! eek@the big words that i dont see often..but newayz that was the first ive read of yours but ill be comin back for more lol *adds to library* tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Thanks, Tiff. I like your pen-name. "The rose, like the cactus flower, protects herself with thorns. We however, impale ourselves on their beauty." |
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Blush Member
since 2002-08-31
Posts 56Ky |
If this was new territory for you I would hate to see you in your stomping grounds This was excellent I love vamp writes the imagery was fantastic on this one I have up vamp writes at another poetry site but you got me beat by farLoved this Susan~ |
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