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Broken Angel
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Broken Angel |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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Broken Angel, hidden in disguise Filling the world with petty lies Hurting everyone you come upon, So much better if you were gone Hey Broken Angel, why don't you go You're not welcome here, don't you know? Run away from here, be on your way Broken Angel, no one wants you to stay Ride, ride away into the fading sunset Ride until eternity you have met Keep looking forward, gray eyes ahead Broken Angel, you're gonna wind up dead Take your crooked halo and then run Broken Angel, your misdeeds won't be undone You ended up here when you fell from the sky And now, each night, to the heavens you cry But Broken Angel, this isn't where you belong So stop burdening us with your sad, sad song Broken Angel, leave this life behind real fast How long did you think the nightmare would last? ~Susie Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are calle |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Woo! It rocks! This is going straight to my library. I think this is the first of yours I've read. Keep it up, I hope to see more. -Kosetsu It can't be! |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Kosetsu, Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed. I didn't even want to write it, actually. I got the idea from my sis's t-shirt. Probably is my first you've read, haven't been here in a long time, due to a lack of writing skills on my part. I'm doing my ketchup reading now. ~Susie Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are calle |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yeah it's definetly a good read! Good message too, sorry I never have anything constructive to sa, but oh well, some criticise, some encourage, so keep writing! "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great read. I did like this a lot. Very talented writer.....w0h00!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great read. I did like this a lot. Very talented writer.....w0h00! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
*Stands up and applauds* VERY nice job, Angel! Wow! This is such a great poem... Nicely done! --Marie It's true that we don't know what we've got until we lose it, but it's also true that we don't know what we've been missing until it arrives. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
ElvenBlood, I'm glad you enjoyed. It's okay to not offer criticism, in fact I don't mind the praise at all. But if you have any suggestions, feel free to tell me. Dopey_Dope, Thank you...twice  . Happy you liked it.Marie, Thanks, it was fun to write. ~Susie Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are calle |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now that was really good. I enjoyed every word I read in this piece. Thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Acire, Thanks . More than happy to share after the extended writer's block.~Susie Many people hear voices when no one is there. Some of them are called mad and are shut up in rooms where they stare at walls all day. Others are calle |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Eww..writer's block. I suffered a year-and-a-half span of that before I joined PiP It can't be! |
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Watersign6 Senior Member
since 2001-05-25
Posts 823Hurricane,WV |
great writing  keep it flowing  |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
I loved the way this poem flowed, well actually i loved all of it. awesome piece. keep writing and posting. looking forward to seeing more from you. |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Watersign6, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Mystic, Thanks for the read . Glad you liked it.~Susie ~*~Born to Blossom and Bloom to Perish~*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Beautifully written.... |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
I love this poem. I know there's not really much I can say, except that I love it, but I do hope to see more from you soon! I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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