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Powder
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0 posted 2001-06-01 11:25 PM


I’m Still Here

I am telling you now, so don't say I didn't
I'm just gonna tell you, can't keep it hidden
I'm not turnin' my back for I'm still here
I trusted you once, when skies were clear.

You have it in your head that I lied to you
Deep down inside, you know it's untrue
The secrets we had, we could always confide
The friendship that was is now pushed aside

You know in your heart what I would say
The last thing I'd do to you is betray
Listen to me now and I'll say it true
I'm still here, a friend for you


© Copyright 2001 Adam Cebulski - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-06-02 12:13 PM


nice...and i hope you gave this poem for the person you wrote it for...i think he/she should know...bye

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2 posted 2001-06-02 07:07 AM


This rocked! Very nice indeed. Friendship kicks.

~Carly

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3 posted 2001-06-02 08:08 AM


yeah i agree give it to them. It could change the whole situation for the better. nice poem.
katie

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4 posted 2001-06-02 08:50 AM


Powerful piece, nicely written, and I wanna agree with everyone, this person should know that you atill are there.

Keep it up

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

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5 posted 2001-06-02 11:46 AM


Misunderstandings like this can end friendships, and that's really sad, because friendship is a treasure! I hope you guys work it out! Thanks for sharing.

"Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli

Powder
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6 posted 2001-06-02 03:05 PM


Thanks for all the replies!  I haven't given it to her...yet.  I don't know if it would make a difference but I can always try I guess.


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7 posted 2001-06-02 03:40 PM


Well done....I enjoyed this one. Very sweet poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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8 posted 2001-06-06 10:01 PM


This was a nice re-assurance   I think you should give this to the person who this is for. Good job  
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9 posted 2001-06-07 10:46 AM


This was a good poem.  I say give it to her soon.  She deserves to know how you really feel.

*~*Amanda*~*

My tears roll right down my cheeks, but they all soak into my pillow.  I feel kinda sorry for it...

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10 posted 2001-06-09 05:15 PM


Thanks, everyone.  I plan on giving it to the person soon-maybe things will change-maybe not but it won't hurt!


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