Teen Poetry #4 |
Meaningless Confusion |
TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Kinda is a silly name, but I didn't have a betta one... Where to go, which road to take, what is real and what is fake? I am standing here all alone, I have to make it on my own. Each word you speak you send assail, shooting me down, making me fail. I try to ignore, I try to be me, but all your doubt is pushing down on me. My dreams simple, my wishes true have to help me make it through. Where to go, which turn to make, I don't want to live an original fake. Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
"Where to go, which turn to make, I don't want to live an original fake." I love this ending! This is a beautiful poem. Simple style, but very emtion-filled. I love it. I bet you probably hate it when people say "I know how you feel." But I do know what you're talking about. I always feel like I can't be myself around people who are my friends... it's not easy. If you ever want to talk, email me: [email protected]. Feel free *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well I thought this was a nice poem. Just stay strong and keep that head up. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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coalesce New Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 9canada |
i loved the poem, i can really relate somewhat to the emotions being stressed. i liked it alot |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
An original fake. Haha... gotta love that. I have been accused of that in other words before. I'll remember that term. The poem had a great flow to it, short lines + rhyme scheme = good flow. A lot of people should remember this formula. Very nice job. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Always be your true self don't pretend and mold yourself to what society wants you to be be who you truly are "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Yes, this is very good!!! It's going into the library, because as much as I say it, I HATE the games people play, and hiding themself is just another! Thaks for writing it "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Nicely written. Being a fake is no way to live your life. Keep your head up and keep writing. ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
What IS real? and what IS fake? It's very hard to determine which path to follow.. however.. i do believe the clues that help solve the puzzle DO exist.. but one shouldn't be regretful if one hasn't stumbled upon them yet.. i havent |
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