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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Needs pushed aside, Pick my heart up off the floor. Another chance to be hurt, More pain for me to endure. Smiling ever so slightly, Show no pain. See another person, Do it over again. Inconsiderate words, Always being told they care. Their so called 'sentiments', Vanish into the air. Over polished lips, A mask upon my face. You give me one more reason, To why im such a disgrace. Love me so tenderly, Care for me so dear. Stay far away, Please dont come near. My glistening tears, Fall to the floor. What you give me isnt good enough, I want from u so much more. Theres one thing i want, Thats the one thing u cant give. What i want from u, Is to be able to live. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I really liked it. Great work. Regina |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I know the feeling. These lines summed up my life: "See another person, Do it over again." Great poem and I hope you can have better luck than I do. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done!!!! I liekd this one a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really liked this one... it sums up what I feel at the moment... great work. Marshal Zu. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job on this. I enjoyed it quite a bit. I await more of your work. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible expression and very good rhythm Shugarhigh ... very well done. Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
VERY well done! Great poem. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thank you all very much for your replies!! I havent posted a poem in here for a lil while so i figured this would be a great one to enter back with...thanx again!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
very well expressed emotions and thoughts Sugarhigh. "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
AHH!! How did I miss this?? Excellent as usual chick! Keep it up and sorry it took me so long! <3ya! Kiley ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this is sooooo good! i absolutely love it, i agree the line "see another person, do it again" sums up my life too LOL  more like see another person, fall for them (if they are a guy and are cute that is lol)definitely goin to library!! ~Valerie~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thanks a lot guys!!! And dont worry about it Kiley =o) Im glad you read it, it doesnt matter how long it took u =o) Thanks for your replies =o) |
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