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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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*Heartbreaker* Why can't I be the heartbreaker instead the one with the broken heart Try as I may, I could never rip someone's heart apart That feeling you get of emptiness like you're the only one on Earth Makes you look at everything asking what's it really worth I try to stay strong now 'cause I know you want me to cry I won't ever give you the satisfaction I'll stand firm 'till the day I die I have a sensitive heart that grows stronger by the day You can't hurt me anymore it doesn't matter what you do or say The more you break my heart the stronger i'll become I've experienced a true heartbreak I guess you've helped me in more ways then one ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This is quite sad. Are things ok with yer guy? Nicely done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job on this poem, Kiley! I thought the last stanza was a great conclusion. Keep strong, hon. Feel free to IM me sometime, I'll be as helpful as I possibly can. Until then... ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Wow, that'sa resilience story if I ever heard one. I don't think we need to worry about you, you're storng, but still, hope you find/have found happiness in life up to this point :-) "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
ooh..i liked everything but the title, it was too cliche for me... nice rhyme and meter, thanks for the read, get better JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
ok, so now I need his home address, phone number, oh and his name so I can kick his soryr little butt to the curb for ya!!  girl, I'm proud of you, don't put up with NO ONE'S unneccessary crap! Luv2LuvYa! ~*~Jesilyn~*~"Tell me why you cry" |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
beautifully said DQ be strong "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Why can't I be the heartbreaker instead the one with the broken heart Try as I may, I could never rip someone's heart apart Girl you should realize by now that guys have no shame...They break girls hearts cause i guess they assume we deserve it...But not all guys are like that..One of these days you are gonna find someone and go back to when you posted these poems...And think that all those heartbreakers were leading you to find that one that isnt gonna break your heart...Good job on this one...Keep it up girl!!! p.s.~And I think its harder for girls to break guys hearts...Thats probably why you cant do it...I know I cant... "If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend." [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 05-18-2001).] |
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HeAvEnS AnGeL Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 168The Hot Girl From Canada |
I don't know one gurl who hasn't had her heart broken by some egotistical guy who think's he can walk all over whoever he pleazes well gurl you just proved them wrong! Your poem rhymed well and had a good flow keep it up and remember WOMEN NEED MEN LIKE FISH NEED BIKES!!! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this poem overall...great job and... "The more you break my heart the stronger i'll become I've experienced a true heartbreak I guess you've helped me in more ways then one" this ended the poem nicely...hope to see more...  ...?if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry" |
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baby0508 Member
since 2001-05-16
Posts 58Moodus, Connecticut |
Hey sweetie that was a great poem. If you want to talk anytime you can e mail me and i'd be glad to talk to ya. i'm here for you!! That poem was so great..it makes you feel strong enough and that is what i need right now. thanks!!!! ~Heather~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
HUN!!!! Please dont be sad  We need to talk!!! I'll e-mail u everything and u e-mail me everything and we'll be okay!!As for the poem, it was so good. You really expressed how you were feeling and im really happy to see you posting again. I've missed your poems! Great job on this one |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
A great poem if I ever saw one. And to the person who said it's harder for girls to break guy's hearts...guess you haven't met the ones I've fallen in love with before. Anyway, and awesome poem, keep it up. *slips this into his library, and vanishes* -Kosetsu "No one holds command over me. |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
this rocked my world! i just had my heart broken a couple months ago and it seems hard but your right, your heart gets strong with everyday. like at first after the breakup... you will miss them, and want the other person back but then over time you realize how much better you can do (cuz u see the bad things *L*) and then you get over it. but the time thing is what i hate. LOL *clicks into her library* this was great! Valerie Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you |
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Suga_Baby Member
since 2000-08-06
Posts 380Maine, USA |
Yeah, what Val said... couldn't have said it better myself... Very good poem, I really enjoyed it!! Nice work  ,Suga "A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep." |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
lol this is like one of the worst poems ive ever posted...but im glad you guys liked it thanks everyone **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Rydr16 New Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 5 |
good job on the poem, dont worry, sum guys suck alot of... well you know what im sayin' ive had my heartbroken nuff times, you get over it altho pple always say at the time, that they wont. go kick his ass =) see-ya -dee |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I disagree with you Kiley, this is really good hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele, |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Hey girl I think this is an awsome poem and try to be happy even though I know how hard it is.You know I'm always here is you need to talk since you've always listened to my problems.Keep up the awsome work. Lauren |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
haha u always bump my bad ones!! thanks tho!**You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
who?  hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
I love this poem how can u say it's one of your worst?But anyway I'll talk to you later! Lauren |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
The more you break my heart the stronger i'll become can i have to honour of kicking his butt for you?....this is a great poem..hehehe..even exceeded your own expectations huh?...keep writing!!!!
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey girlie, Great piece. I have to agree with pretty much everyone's comments. This a great poem and I am glad it made you grow in the end. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front." |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this one. I know the feeling of being the one always getting their heart broken. The last stanza was awesome because it was so truthful. After it happens once, it seems that it makes it easier the next time. Not that anyone would want a next time. Jon |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks everyone **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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PiXiEpUnKeR Junior Member
since 2001-06-06
Posts 49IL, USA |
I've ALWAYS had my heartbroken. From just little breakups to huge messy ones involving my best friend and my boyfriend cheating together. But I have finally found someone who loves me dearly; and who I think sometimes loves me more than I love him. It's a great feeling to wake up dying to hear his voice and to touch his face. I know when you find a true love such as mine, that you'll thank all the guys who've broken you heart because if you never get over those losers, you will never find your true love. As my grandma says, You have to kiss many of frogs before you find your true prince! |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Please don't hate me! Lauren |
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stace_co2003 Member
since 2001-03-30
Posts 497In a dream world |
awwwwwwwww, don't be sad!!! *hugs* hope you feel better really soon! and i hope everything works out for you alright!  I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again. |
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obscurity of cloud Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 294....:::::******:::::.... |
This has a great concept to it. Wonderful work. "so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost |
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