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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2001-03-06 02:28 PM


*Heartbreaker*

Why can't I be the heartbreaker
instead the one with the broken heart
Try as I may, I could never
rip someone's heart apart

That feeling you get of emptiness
like you're the only one on Earth
Makes you look at everything
asking what's it really worth

I try to stay strong now
'cause I know you want me to cry
I won't ever give you the satisfaction
I'll stand firm 'till the day I die

I have a sensitive heart
that grows stronger by the day
You can't hurt me anymore
it doesn't matter what you do or say

The more you break my heart
the stronger i'll become
I've experienced a true heartbreak
I guess you've helped me in more ways then one


¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

© Copyright 2001 Kiley - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-06 04:25 PM


This is quite sad. Are things ok with yer guy?
Nicely done here.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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2 posted 2001-03-06 05:44 PM


Good job on this poem, Kiley!
I thought the last stanza was a great conclusion.
Keep strong, hon. Feel free to IM me sometime, I'll be as helpful as I possibly can.
Until then...
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan


Elvenblood
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3 posted 2001-03-06 07:44 PM


Wow, that'sa resilience story if I ever heard one. I don't think we need to worry about you, you're storng, but still, hope you find/have found happiness in life up to this point :-)

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

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4 posted 2001-03-06 08:35 PM


ooh..i liked everything but the title, it was too cliche for me... nice rhyme and meter, thanks for the read, get better

JR

When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself...

StarPryncess17
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5 posted 2001-03-06 08:44 PM


ok, so now I need his home address, phone number, oh and his name so I can kick his soryr little butt to the curb for ya!! girl, I'm proud of you, don't put up with NO ONE'S unneccessary crap! Luv2LuvYa! ~*~Jesilyn~*~

"Tell me why you cry"

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6 posted 2001-03-07 06:49 PM


beautifully said DQ
be strong

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Erin
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7 posted 2001-05-18 12:13 PM


Why can't I be the heartbreaker
instead the one with the broken heart
Try as I may, I could never
rip someone's heart apart

Girl you should realize by now that guys have no shame...They break girls hearts cause i guess they assume we deserve it...But not all guys are like that..One of these days you are gonna find someone and go back to when you posted these poems...And think that all those heartbreakers were leading you to find that one that isnt gonna break your heart...Good job on this one...Keep it up girl!!!

p.s.~And I think its harder for girls to break guys hearts...Thats probably why you cant do it...I know I cant...


"If you should die before me, ask if you could bring a friend."

[This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 05-18-2001).]

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8 posted 2001-05-18 12:48 PM


I don't know one gurl who hasn't had her heart broken by some egotistical guy
who think's he can walk all over whoever he pleazes well gurl you just proved them wrong! Your poem rhymed well and had a good flow keep it up and remember
WOMEN NEED MEN LIKE FISH NEED BIKES!!!

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9 posted 2001-05-18 01:34 AM


i liked this poem overall...great job and...

"The more you break my heart
the stronger i'll become
I've experienced a true heartbreak
I guess you've helped me in more ways then one"

this ended the poem nicely...hope to see more... ...?

if i die before i wake , i pray the lord my soul will take-"when thugs cry"

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10 posted 2001-05-18 08:56 AM


Hey sweetie that was a great poem. If you want to talk anytime you can e mail me and i'd be glad to talk to ya. i'm here for you!! That poem was so great..it makes you feel strong enough and that is what i need right now. thanks!!!!
~Heather~


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11 posted 2001-05-19 12:09 PM


HUN!!!! Please dont be sad   We need to talk!!! I'll e-mail u everything and u e-mail me everything and we'll be okay!!
As for the poem, it was so good. You really expressed how you were feeling and im really happy to see you posting again. I've missed your poems! Great job on this one  

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12 posted 2001-05-19 12:31 PM


A great poem if I ever saw one. And to the person who said it's harder for girls to break guy's hearts...guess you haven't met the ones I've fallen in love with before. Anyway, and awesome poem, keep it up. *slips this into his library, and vanishes*

-Kosetsu

"No one holds command over me.
No man.
No god.
No prince."

~sugarpie313~
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13 posted 2001-05-19 01:16 PM


this rocked my world! i just had my heart broken a couple months ago and it seems hard but your right, your heart gets strong with everyday. like at first after the breakup...  you will miss them, and want the other person back but then over time you realize how much better you can do (cuz u see the bad things *L*) and then you get over it. but the time thing is what i hate. LOL *clicks into her library* this was great!

Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

Suga_Baby
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14 posted 2001-05-20 04:24 PM


Yeah, what Val said... couldn't have said it better myself...

Very good poem, I really enjoyed it!! Nice work  

,
Suga

"A dream is a wish your heart makes while you are fast asleep."

DancinQueen
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15 posted 2001-05-20 04:40 PM


lol this is like one of the worst poems ive ever posted...but im glad you guys liked it  


thanks everyone

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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16 posted 2001-05-21 10:59 PM


good job on the poem,
dont worry, sum guys suck alot of...
well you know what im sayin'
ive had my heartbroken nuff times, you get over it altho pple always say at the time, that they wont.
go kick his ass =)
see-ya
-dee

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17 posted 2001-06-05 06:51 PM


I disagree with you Kiley, this is really good  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Allan, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michele,

TopGunLauren
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18 posted 2001-06-06 01:05 AM


Hey girl I think this is an awsome poem and try to be happy even though I know how hard it is.You know I'm always here is you need to talk since you've always listened to my problems.Keep up the awsome work.
  Lauren

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19 posted 2001-06-06 01:27 AM


haha u always bump my bad ones!!   thanks tho!

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Acies
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20 posted 2001-06-06 08:05 PM


who?  

hi Sweets, Lizzy, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Val, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Maree, Michel

TopGunLauren
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21 posted 2001-06-06 11:13 PM


I love this poem how can u say it's one of your worst?But anyway I'll talk to you later!
  Lauren

cherish
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22 posted 2001-06-07 02:08 AM


The more you break my heart
                               the stronger i'll become

can i have to honour of kicking his butt for you?....this is a great poem..hehehe..even exceeded your own expectations huh?...keep writing!!!!



"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

Chel
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23 posted 2001-06-07 09:50 AM


Hey girlie,
   Great piece.  I have to agree with pretty much everyone's comments.  This a great poem and I am glad it made you grow in the end.  Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front."
"You are special and unique in your own way." "Your FAITH is all you need"

keoni
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24 posted 2001-06-07 10:44 AM


I liked this one. I know the feeling of being the one always getting their heart broken. The last stanza was awesome because it was so truthful. After it happens once, it seems that it makes it easier the next time. Not that anyone would want a next time.
Jon

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25 posted 2001-06-08 12:24 PM


thanks everyone

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

PiXiEpUnKeR
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26 posted 2001-06-08 10:27 AM


I've ALWAYS had my heartbroken. From just little breakups to huge messy ones involving my best friend and my boyfriend cheating together. But I have finally found someone who loves me dearly; and who I think sometimes loves me more than I love him. It's a great feeling to wake up dying to hear his voice and to touch his face. I know when you find a true love such as mine, that you'll thank all the guys who've broken you heart because if you never get over those losers, you will never find your true love. As my grandma says, You have to kiss many of frogs before you find your true prince!
TopGunLauren
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27 posted 2001-06-10 04:08 AM


Please don't hate me!  
  Lauren

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28 posted 2001-06-10 03:16 PM


awwwwwwwww, don't be sad!!! *hugs*

hope you feel better really soon! and i hope everything works out for you alright!

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

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29 posted 2001-06-10 06:48 PM


This has a great concept to it.  Wonderful work.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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