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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2001-06-10 04:43 AM

Oooh my, I am SO tired. I just wrote this, I started writing and let whatever comes out of my mind come out, and wrote it down. This is all that is on my mind at the moment, not sure if it makes sense, but I think "subconcious" poems are some of the best. It's all from the heart. It came straight from who knows where and onto the computer. Anyway, it's not great, but not too horrible, I don't think. The rhyme scheme is good, but the lengths of the lines vary a lot.

TICK AND TOCK

I'm sitting here writing
I've got nothing else to do
It's nothing exciting
Just another little poem

I don't know what
It might be about
My mind is completely shut
I'm too tired to think

Why am I wriiting this?
I really don't know
I still haven't had my first kiss
But that doesn't matter at the moment

I have a lot going on now
But I can't seem to get it out
I think I'm going to have a cow
All this stuff is building up inside

My mind keeps wandering
Thinking, mainly of Malloree (Shhh, don't tell)
There's many points I'm pondering
But none have any relevance

I wish that we could just go out
Or that Rachael would see me for me
For both things I have much doubt
Oh well life's just dumb

It's two O'clock
And I'm too tired to write
My watch is going tick and tock
I just want to get to sleep

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

stace_co2003
Member

since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

1 posted 2001-06-10 02:27 PM

I like this poem, and the flow was nice. and yeah, poems like these are the best.

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-06-10 06:34 PM

Not your best, but I can see that this did come from your heart. I liked that. It was a very honest poem. I enjoy your poetry even though this wasn't the best i've read from you. Hope to see more man!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

obscurity of cloud
Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 294
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3 posted 2001-06-10 07:33 PM

It has that nice open minded flow to it. Nice work.

"so when at times the mob is swayed to carry praise or blame too far, we may choose something like a star" --Frost

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