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Perfection" Any comments would be sooo appreciated!
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Perfection" Any comments would be sooo appreciated! |
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CareBear3 Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 39New Hampshire |
What is the most perfect thing in life? Is it love, is it money, is it happiness? Is it unique to every person? Perhaps perfection is not found in an idea or a possession. Maybe perfection lies in things that are there for all people in the world. Maybe perfection is sitting on a beach and looking out at the ocean, realizing you are so small compared to this massive body of water, discovering that looking out you can’t imagine that this ocean will ever end, but realizing it eventually will. But maybe perfection is the understanding that the end of your ocean is someone else’s beginning, and they are thinking the exact same thing as you. Maybe perfection, is the awareness that you are not alone. "In great moments life seems neither right nor wrong but something greater it seems inevitable" ~Kelley |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
lovely ideas of perfection i agree that perfection probably isnt in possessions but rather in nature great one! ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Perfection is not what we want, it's what we strive for. And because we strive for this, without achieving it, we can't become perfect. Perfection would mean that we are all identical. Do we want that? Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Perfection, like beauty, is in the eye of the beholder and is also relative to the subject in question, I think you made a "perfect" representation of one of man's major questions about life. The ocean was a nice simily to perfection as well, anyways great poem, keep writing, we need more work like yours and no one can do work like yours better than you right? "The world is ending and it's making me watch" -Me >¶Øʆ< |
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Bright_Eyes Junior Member
since 2000-12-22
Posts 29Plymouth, MN |
Wow, that was touching....It made me think about perfection and why everyone strives to achieve it. It would be a rather boring world if everyone were perfect! My favorite line is, "Maybe perfection, is the awareness that you are not alone." I also enjoyed the part about the ocean, the end is the beginning. I really can't wait to read another! ~Becky |
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Baby Gansta Junior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 24 |
Everyone's idea of perfection is different, but as Bright Eyez said, if we we're all perfect then the world would be a boring lpace with no individuality, anywayz great poem...my favourite line was "is it unique to every person"?...that is so true. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here........perfection. I don't think it exists, period.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Interesting ideas from everybody here, I'm going to say that to realize that something is perfect would ruin it's perfection. The perfect things in life are the things we do not see. Does that make sense? Anyway, great job on the poem  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
hmmmm *Starts thinking* hang on I will not start on this topic or I will never got to bed tonight!! This is a great piece... keep up the great work!! Melz!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
oh wow, this is really good i see your thoughts pretty well in this one and i never even thought about it that way thanks for giving me a perspective in life I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
i remember perfection. it was just there for a split second. then it all crumbled. and i started building again. it was a beautiful and magical thing. and thats all i remember. (haha, i modify it and its a poem) great poem carebear San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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