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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
This one girl she's a part of me She's in a struggle with herself and her family I always ask her to open up to me But all she does is take another shot and says don't worry about me I feel and sense a cry for help But yet she keeps me back For one day she can welcome me and then turn her back This one girl is a part of me I hope one day she is finally free I hope one day she can set us both free |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great poem... you feel restrained by your signifigant other's introvertedness... It's too bad, really, that some people just keep these things to themselves. I hope that you earn enough trust for her to, eventually, open up to you. Best of luck. -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
This is a great peice... just give your friend space and time and they will come around... trust me I do this too... I don't talk unless I am ready to... Melz!!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I know how you feel in the poem. Very good. You expressed yourself well.  "Keep breathing Don't lose your nerve"- Radiohead I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
nice.. some good repetition of words im glad i read it  ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very good poem. I don't really have any advice to share, so I'll just say it again, very good poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
there goes Lake and his advice  i have one thing to say when she's ready she'll tell ya so, don't worry too much about it its just gonna kill you inside I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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