Teen Poetry #4 |
My Poem |
NeverSayDie Junior Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 39Duluth, MN & Grand Forks ND |
The cut are deep the feelings show The love for others ebbs and flows The hieghts of love are without bounds The hate of other brings us down Why does the love for others change With feelings hurt and rearranged Thoughs of good and thoughs of bad Frustrate us and make us mad But with some help we all may know Just what we have and what we show But can we show our feelings true With a heart all cold and blue I know what i know and i do what i do with feelings of hope and friendship true Maybe with some time i'll see the light A find a truth ill find whats right. |
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Virgil Junior Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 43Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
Congratulations! A great first post! Keep it up! "By other ways, by other ferries, not here, shalt thou pass over: a lighter boat must carry thee." "I AM CANADIAN!!" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! Great first post! I liked this one a lot. I can relate to it perfectly. I sure do hope that you post more. Keep them coming in! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You really are expressive in this piece... I'm assuming that your title is the title, and not a statment, when i compliment you on it. "My Poem." Such simplicity and humbleness, i absolutely love it. It expresses a lot. I hope you just didn't say that for lack of a title, 'cause that would be embarassing for me! ^_^ The whole poem worked nicely for me. Welcome to Passions. -Allan |
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NeverSayDie Junior Member
since 2001-01-18
Posts 39Duluth, MN & Grand Forks ND |
thanks everyone ill try to keep my poems coming and as good as this one thanks again |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions NeverSayDie! We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. This was a lovely first post. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message) Best wishes, /Kit |
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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
great poem. I enjoyed it greatly. I look forward to reading more of your work. Welcome to Passions. Midnight Maverick |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! This was an excellent first post and i agree with what your saying. I liked it a lot and i looked forward to reading more work from you! Welcome! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Welcome welcome welcome! Marvelous first post. You'll fit right in here with all these wonderful people. Keep em comin!! ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Welcome to Passions < !signature-->Welcome to the forum and I also hope that you stick around and post some more soon. This poem is really good! "Why does the love for others change With feelings hurt and rearranged" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 01-19-2001).] |
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