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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa 
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This one I don't know where it came from... I've said I'm sorry what more do you need? Shoot a hole in my chest and watch it bleed? See me fall down and bellow of pain, crawling on the ground leaving my stain? Kick me in the stomach judt before I die and spit in my face as you laugh goodbye? Why all this huff and puff? Why can't sorry just be enough? Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice! |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Little bit of spite? I like it. Very "nice". I've never read your work beofre now, I like it! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this poem was great. I mean you said "sorry" to the person, but depending upon the degree of what the situation is.....sometimes sorry just isn't enough. Anyway, nicely done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Good job! "As you laugh goodbye" was an excellent line. As were they all. You expressed yourself well, even if you didn't know where it came from!  See you around. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Sometimes i feel like this to...like you can never do enough for the person to make them forgive you. Great poem..sometimes the best poems come from the most unknown places! |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Powerless to calm the savage beast that torments the very person who torments you.. I'm hoping that this person feels regret for how he treats you..(whether he's fictional or not! :-) and maybe he'll finally say sorry himself?? |
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