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TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

0 posted 2001-03-03 05:48 PM

Hey you guys...can you believe it, after almost three months I am finally back online and back with my poetry family...c yas around

When can I tell you
about my day?
Anytime, but not now.
When can I tell you
I'm on the wrong way?
Anytime, but not now.

When will you look
and see my tears so near?
Anytime, but not now.
When will you look
and see it's of fear?
Anytime but not now.

When will you realize
the mistakes you said?
Soon, but not now.
When will you realize
I'm already dead?
Never!

You don't believe in now.

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Chel
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA

1 posted 2001-03-03 07:55 PM

Tears, this is very interesting. I felt a lot of emotion in this piece. Glad to see your back. Keep up the great work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Never say 'I Love You' unless you mean it"

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-04 12:46 PM

I liked this. It made me think a bit...the person doesn't believe in the present. Quite nicely done.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-04 03:09 AM

I love the trick to this poem... your repitition, and total defiance of it at the end. Took me by complete surprise.
It was absolutely marvelous. Great job.
~Allan

Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

4 posted 2001-07-03 04:04 PM

ahh.. like.. i can understand how when you arent with the person you think about all ot the things that could be said or all the things your could have done like give the person a big hug or forgive the person for anything but when the present time actually hits and you are actually together its just another cliche of arguments and heartache and the person never stops and asks himself (or herself) why am i doing this to her? why am I not kissing those welling tears away? why cant I believe in siezing the present time??? Why Why Why THEY NEVER STOP AND ASK WHY

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