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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA 
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I had NO idea what I was feeling in this, but it was BAD! Enjoy, hope it helps someone, because it didn't help me much. I cannot express myself I know now what to say I see the book on the shelf And look to find my way The first page of the book Suicide I don’t even look Because it’s always first to hook The second page Cutting Why endure the painful rage When I know this is just a stage The page that is next Anger Lashing out and calling hexed Still I will be perplexed I throw the book down Unwilling to wait It curiously opens To reveal my fate On a page of shambles and tatters Lay the words in blood spattered And making me read the cobble clatter That I will never feel the same again “Why did I try?!” I scream It echoes back to me as if a dream “Get used to it” the book reads on the seam The pages are now all blank I want to step back To who I used to be When I could live in solitude Before anyone got to me I hate being weak I feel like I’m going to cry How pathetic I am now Why did I ever try I shredded the ancient tome Relishing its pain being greater than mine If I can’t destroy myself I’ll destroy anything I can find My anger has burnt me I can no longer move But I still feel the pain As if on my chest are hooves What a sick world I think Rewarding bigots and crushing me But who can I fool, the world is neutral Then I start to see "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Take that, Bible!  You expressed your rage excellently. I wrote a few angry poems myself on such a topic. Thanks for the daring post. This poem has a very important message to it. Thanks for the read. Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Bah humbug. Yes well you did express your rage well. Maybe this'll get deleted hehe..... *a bible lands on allan's head screaming "right back at cha!"* Ooops, allan you ok?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
YOU KNOW I LOVE THIS! hahaha... this one is great like all the others. if this gets deleted i'd be soooooo mad. your expressing your life as a teen which is what this forum is for.  ~*VALERIE*~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Ron
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
I think it's intriguing how each of us inserts a part of our own lives and perceptions into a piece of poetry. Frankly, I don't know why anyone would interpret the "book" as a Bible. The first page of the Bible certainly isn't suicide, the second page isn't about cutting, and the pages are never blank. To me, the book is a very appropriate metaphor for a society that seemingly condones suicide and cutting by romanticizing them. I congratulate the author for showing the wisdom of skipping those pages, and the insight in realizing that even such wisdom doesn't necessarily make things feel better. The act of destroying the book, in anger and retaliation, seems to coincide well with much of what we see in the world. And I particularly like the last stanza, with the suggestion that life isn't always fair, won't ever be consistently fair, and it doesn't even matter - because we make our own choices and are responsible for our own destiny. I agree the poem has a powerful message, but more importantly, I think it has energy and power in its own right - as a poem able to express the human condition. Excellent piece! |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
For absolutely sure: I will NEVER write about the bible. Even that Haiku "Tears of Heaven..." I wriote that to express rain ok? I will NEVER write of the bible. Nor will I use the bible, and being an Atheist, I would never turn to the bible for answers, I should have cleared that up before. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I'm just wondering what the book is, or does it symbolize seomething? You've expressed yourself well on this piece, but i'd like to get little help still. pls explain a bit...thanks "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ you got a reply from the all mighty Ron. I havent even gotten a reply from him. EXCELLENT poem..and i have no idea where allan got bible? because thats not at all what i was thinking...i thought, well actually first i was thinking Chicken Soup For The Teenage Soul lol which i know is way off..it just popped into my head. Then i thought about a past diary?? i dont know..its a mystery but it makes your poem all the better...great job*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 02-28-2001).] |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
OK, the book isn't a real book! There's nothing in publication (yet) that can be described like that. The book is a more solid form of someone's mind and/or soul during something like this. The first solution is always painful in my experience. Then the person just gives up on trying to resolve their conflicts. And the answer comes to themthen. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Very intersting read. sounds a little like my life....well I though it experessed alot. I never thought it was the bible though.. Regina goes in my libary |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
Wow, You expressed your rage the right way. I LOVED THIS POEM. Allan, hope the bible didn't hurt you too bad |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Oh my... this really stirred some controversial issues eh? Allan, damn man, hate to see you being wrong for once! Well that metaphor for the book was pure genius, your a very creative writer..."“Why did I try?!” I scream It echoes back to me as if a dream “Get used to it” the book reads on the seam The pages are now all blank" JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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