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Dropping the Brown Bottle (tanka)
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Dropping the Brown Bottle (tanka) |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg 
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(Okay, today I recieved the best news I have heard in several years. My father came into my room and wanted to have a talk with me. After twenty-five years of drinking, he is quitting. I have never in my life been so proud of him, because I have not been alive to see him without an alcohol problem. Today is a great day for me... and for my father.) three hundred pound man carried for so many years with a brown bottle today he dropped the bottle never have I been so proud |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
its on!!!!!ya! im so happy!i love this poem! iin my library it goes! you wanna jummp up and down?!lol great work allan! Regina [This message has been edited by Ina (edited 02-26-2001).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
  IM SOO HAPPY FOR YOU!! ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Allan!! This is so fantastic! Oh yay for you and your father!  I am so happy for you. Keep on smiling buddy. ~AF~ "Love makes us poets and the approach of death should make us philosophers." ~ George Santayana |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
That is wonderful new, Allan. Best of luck to your father.  |
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DreadedLiver Member
since 2001-01-23
Posts 56Alter, Ego |
Oh how wonderful...As I said earlier my dad went through this too. It takes a long time but in the end you'll smile forever! The title just jumps at me too, what a wonderful job! Ooops two wonderfuls Wonderfully, Jeremy "zzzIzzzAMzzzJEREMYDRAULzzz" |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
dammit, you know that was me on that last post  When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Addiction can be a very difficult thing to break. Encourage him always. BTW, perhaps I should write another war poem and dedicate it to him[like a war against addiction]... I hope your father is able to destroy this habbit. BTW, good tanka. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Thanks everyone... hehe... I see a few of us are beginning to notice the poem attached to the news, and praise that as well.  I appreciate it.There is still a long way to go, but we're fighting the good fight. Fractal: That might be nice. Thanks for the recognition. -Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 02-27-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
It's good to know that your father is giving up the bottle. It's a bad habit that my dad, and grandpa suffered from. I hope all goes well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I hope things go good for him and for you, this can be a major lifestyle change. Nice job on the poem and congrats to your dad for making this decision. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.therainforestsite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
...........YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 02-27-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
good for you Alan and good for your dad too "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
OH!! Great news..... and nice post! Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Finally good news and a positive post. YAY! "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
look what i found! i enjoy reading tankas, allan and hope to read more from you. and i do hope your father is doing fine |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
as a daughter who also has a fater with an alcohol problem i can say form experience that i am very happy for you and your father, i hope all goes well as for the actually piece this is a cool format, i had never seen it before... it flows good and is well written great work and congrats to your father~*Justine*~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
This kind of hurt me to read again... well I posted this a long time ago, but it's not exactly true anymore. So I hope nobody else gets too excited over it or anything... Thanks for your replies. ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
I am so sorry Allan. I rushed to the bottom of the page to post, congradulating you, just to find the rotten news. Well, my mom also drinks, and as many times as she has said she would stop in the 14 years of my life, she is still drinking. And she isnt a responsible drinker, she is just... whatever. Anyways, I hope things work out for you.  We're here for you!*~*Amanda*~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Can we please let this one fall? No more replies please. |
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