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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
Lost, in a world full of open doors of opportunities that have all been slammed shut it seems i am always preparing for the future preparing in school to get into college preparing in college to get a good job saving money for a comfortable retirement all this time and effort, just to settle down But why settle down, to be stuck with two kids and a full time job paying off loan after loan just to retire and let my offspring live a richer life than mine and live only the last 10 years of my life with money and in happiness to hell with my last years I want to experience the world now not when i am 60, on a seniors cruise the way this world is going who knows if i will still be alive my destiny is not within a student loan it is within my heart nothing can hold me back now And when i am in mid life crisis i will still be free in spirit never beaten down by doors slammed shut but to realize that the opportunity to live is greater than any other known to man and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... [This message has been edited by LucidityNow (edited 04-24-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a good poem. I guess none of us want to still be worrying about student loans when were 60. Anyway, keep writing! *~*Amanda*~* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yes, it's unfortunate that the world is only open to us after we either retire or get a lot of money. However with advances in medicine and biological research (for example, the mapping of the human genome), we are bound to increase our lifespan signifigantly. Still, I am certain that this would mean a higher retirement age, you'd be in better shape whenever retirement time occurs.  ~Allan Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day. Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the theme of the poem. Quite dif. I liked it very much.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is really good, I liked this. Nice work, I hope to see more. --Marie subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart. |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I know the feeling of wanting to be so much more in life. You have captured the wanting and the need for making something of yourself very well. This is a great poem I really liked it. If this is your true thoughts then I deeply sympaythise for you and I hope that you do make something of your life! Until your next poem... ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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