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princess^sarah
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0 posted 2001-04-27 09:37 PM


Through my window the sunlight poured, breaking the silent grip the darkness had.
As the invisible touch of light crept over my eyes, I quickly embraced the warm sensations on my cold body, awaking my heart from its long slumber. Nestled tight in the deep serenity that had just engulfed me, afraid to move so that I wouldn't lose the fire that was quickly consuming all of my fears. As lingering emotions of anger kissed my lips as they departed from my beating chest, a new feeling of trust gently caressed my face as I awoke with a new heart. On the wings of a bird you flew into my life. You truly are the sunlight that warmed me, the feelings that held me, and the love that saved me.
this a favourite of mine..
i hope u enjoy
and i hope u like my new pic guys

© Copyright 2001 sarah alford - All Rights Reserved
princess^sarah
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1 posted 2001-04-27 09:39 PM


DANG!!!!
the new pic hasnt been accepted yet >  

[This message has been edited by acire (edited 04-27-2001).]

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2 posted 2001-04-27 09:51 PM


Soon enough it will..

Anyhow, I did like this. Very well written. I think you did wonderful on it and I hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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3 posted 2001-04-27 10:06 PM


this is definitly one of ur best..
i really enjoyed the read..
an awesome poem...pure beauty
keep writing sarah

ps
the pic it'll get approved no worries k?..bye

...?

death is not the greatest loss in life. the greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live. -norman cousins

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4 posted 2001-04-27 11:29 PM


This is awesome.
Your photo is approved.  
But more importantly, this piece is awesome.     Very very very awesome, although not one of your best.  
Doesn't that show what a marvelous poet you've become?
~Allan

Build a man a fire, and he's warm for a day.  Set a man on fire, and he'll be warm for the rest of his life.  
~Unknown

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5 posted 2001-04-27 11:29 PM


Beautiful poem Sarah
probably pne of your best
I do have one suggestion though,
It wouldve been better if you typed it in lines and stanzas
just my opinion  
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee."  W.S.

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6 posted 2001-04-28 01:19 PM


Sarah~ You are beautiful   and this picture reflects that so much better   Glad to see you changed it....this is a wonderful poem too    SEA
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